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Rehab

Postby mcZu » Nov 18th, '09, 19:59

Wrote this to Rihanna's Rehab (beat, HERE). Feedback is appreciated.

Some emotions are like a noose to me
Depression aint new to me
Talking shit like it’s news to me
So… it’s quite loose to see
Losing isn’t quite for me
I know there’ve been some for me
Through their songs they’ve informed me
So I’m quit in form
I’m ‘bout to riot the storm
And quiet the norm that’s born
Back to the past
Not near me.. That’s where she can put her ass-at
She’s a liability ya hear me
I’ll laugh last while I’m being me
Ya feeling me?
It’s thin to see while concealing me
The things I see are realer than just speech
I know I’m part of the 5Stars
But why do I need an epiphany?
I’ve already seen life’s integrity
Internal hunger that’s in me is affecting me
And saddening me
People resort to guns, triggers at anatomies
On the block all they do is trigger anomalies
Cornered, now that’s what I call trigonometry
I try to trigger symmetry
Though I just see sin in me
I wish that my brain and heart confide in synergy
It’s simple to me, yet impossible to reach
And possibly too deep as well
Well, I wish all human beings well
However, the wishing well
Is missing some attachments
I was too attached to that woman
So now I’m attached to the cement
Back to the basics and it’s evening
Covering the daily basis
I try to cover life’s basics
Yet I daily flow along the bay of shit
Maybe I’m just shit?
Or maybe the whole world is such a trick
Balanced on lust and mimicking
Yes, I met-a-sin, yet it’s sickening
My pen and pad a rehab, so I’m feeling sick in-
..my head, wanna cry, why?
No need to say, my eyes don’t even contain liquid...
"Truth is limitless in its range; if you drop a 'T' and look at it in reverse, it could hurt."
- Lupe Fiasco

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Re: Rehab

Postby D'Leh » Nov 18th, '09, 20:34

really good man!! for real!!! i really like it, flow, structure we're awesome, check out if you want. my last drops Heroin and Wake Up
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Re: Rehab

Postby Spyder » Nov 18th, '09, 21:23

holy fuck Zu great mind thinks alike :o
im writing a peice that starts out almost exactly like that
diff topic and diff flow,

but dont be mad when u hear it cause i wrote it today :sweating:
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Re: Rehab

Postby mcZu » Nov 19th, '09, 00:08

Thanks D'leh and Spyder. And, lol at Spyder, it can't be better than mine. :shifty:
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Re: Rehab

Postby Spyder » Nov 19th, '09, 01:02

cant promise anything :shifty:
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Re: Rehab

Postby classthe_king » Nov 19th, '09, 03:09

zu i would leave feed but the feed left by d'leh is so good i can't match it.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Rehab

Postby Xray » Nov 19th, '09, 08:16

Good shit man, just lose the Rhianna beat. :zipped:
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Re: Rehab

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 19th, '09, 19:26

Yo that flowed pretty good bro. Nice creative vibe toit. Stay droppin hot Zu :y:
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