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Postby D'Leh » Nov 24th, '09, 16:53

i ment it when i said i out shine anybody that collabs with me
i wasnt joking when i said i take full emcees and make them look empty
rappers dont give a fuck about truth anymore they too self absorbed
i stormed the game, there aint an aspect of rap i aint explored
you ask why my scripts are so long and my lines exceed the snare
hate me because you cant come up with the imagery that i compare
yall need to agree with me and stop hating what you cant understand
smuggled 16 bars of c4 into rap and exploded left emcees in shambles rap undermanned
raid my stash scientific lyrics studied my enemies in secret labs
when i rap they keeping tabs asking why i act mad when i rap fast
slow basic rhymes is below me and decent is a word i cant handle
you wonder why i dont let yall in on my genius i steal the mic and ramble
yall cant handle even half the ideas i have on my mental hardrive
yall need to ask why i get undermined ill say it again im the best of all time.. Hype Archives.
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Re: Hype Archives

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 24th, '09, 16:56

Dude there's no kind of separation in the lines...can you put commas or something in there
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Re: Hype Archives

Postby D'Leh » Nov 24th, '09, 16:57

i've just pit that. kinda hurry right?
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Re: Hype Archives

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 24th, '09, 17:02

D'Leh wrote:i've just pit that. kinda hurry right?

Huh?
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Re: Hype Archives

Postby D'Leh » Nov 24th, '09, 17:07

sorry, im in a hurry, i didnt post any comas and shit because i wrote it very fast
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Re: Hype Archives

Postby Slim Zaddy » Nov 25th, '09, 14:30

i like da way you express ya self over here, it's true ya lines are kind of long , but it has emotions and u had a point to prove and u did, u got soem good lines,, but next time try to insert internal rhymes and more multies in order to have a better flow, cuz u lack the flow here buddy :flower: .. but overl all i liked it ,, keep postin bro :y:
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