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Postby BILI » Nov 30th, '09, 19:51

All that I feel lately is pain,all that I know lately is mess in my brain
My girlfriend is my only chain,shes the only thing that stoppin me from leavin this place
Oh well,but now its time for hers last kiss to my face
Mihaela says:"If you dont take me wit you,that`ll be really mean"
"But baby this path is really hard and extreme,how else can I redeem
And,man,its so fucking hard when I scream in my dreams
I gotta get away from this,cause its just 2 many sleepless nights
My girlfriend`s mad now,she thinks I`m some heartless knight
I`m holding my damn tears,actin tough,just playing smart
But now this pain is like a cloud above my dying heart
I hate these goodbyes,I l glanced at her last time,and saw tears in those eyes
Damn I shoulda be more wise.Why leave her?When shes the real prize

My gf is leavin town for some time :( :( ,so I did this,but here its like I`m leaving,but pain is still here :(
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Re: Leaving

Postby Wic Kid » Nov 30th, '09, 19:54

Good piece. Rhymes were alrite, and its quite emotional. You really put your heart in this. Keep up the good work. :b:
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Re: Leaving

Postby BILI » Nov 30th, '09, 19:59

Wic Kid wrote:Good piece. Rhymes were alrite, and its quite emotional. You really put your heart in this. Keep up the good work. :b:

thx man :b:
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Re: Leaving

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 30th, '09, 20:41

Yeah multis werent off like usual but its a more emotional piece so it'll fly. lol that sucks homie where is she goin, for how long?
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Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Re: Leaving

Postby BILI » Dec 1st, '09, 19:01

Yah-hah wrote:Yeah multis werent off like usual but its a more emotional piece so it'll fly. lol that sucks homie where is she goin, for how long?

shes gonna stay in another city for like a 2 weeks and it`ll be during Christmas time :(
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Re: Leaving

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 1st, '09, 19:02

Wow the worst time too. Why is she leavin?
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Leaving

Postby BILI » Dec 1st, '09, 19:17

Yah-hah wrote:Wow the worst time too. Why is she leavin?

she`s goin to see some relatives and spend Christmas time wit them,she told that she does this every year :(
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