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I Promise

Postby j2dat » Dec 4th, '09, 20:00

written especially for my boo (PINK) :D :heart:


I promise to be there, whenever you need me,
you juz promise that you will never up n leave me,
baby i promise and this is my promise song,
it wont be short, wont be too long
i promise to do ya right, never to do ya wrong
i promise to stay true, as long as you do, baby it's ON!
i promise to hold you, and make sure your alright,
i promise to not start a fight, or say something you might not like
how could I? i promise baby, as long as your true,
do you know exactly the things i go through the things id do,
to make this possible, i promise im tryin my best,
thats all i can do, i promise the best for me n you, nothing less.
i promise nothin but happy days, and no stress,
and when you have some, im the one that gets it off ya chest
i promise to comfort you, and take away the pain,
i promise to make it a sunny day when it rain
i promise to make sure we both feel the same,
this is true love, baby I promise this isnt a game,
i promise to love you and be the one you can count on,
JUZ PROMISE ME THE SAME, and now that i can count on
you know its amazing, i promise it's so real,
baby, i promise to let you know everything i feel
so let it be known, i promise to never let you go,
i love you baby, and that you should already know
Mary Jane knock I answer with open arms (hello?)
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Re: I Promise

Postby BILI » Dec 4th, '09, 20:21

Nice drop man,flow was good,rhymes were ok,few nice multies(try to have more of those)all in all nice stuff.Lookin forward to see more from you :y:
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Re: I Promise

Postby Spyder » Dec 4th, '09, 20:39

wasnt feeling this piece at all bro not gonna lie
i saw only two multies, and never felt the emotion in a piece that its supposed to be evident

just my honest opinion
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Re: I Promise

Postby j2dat » Dec 4th, '09, 20:44

Bili - thanks man for the feed, i will work on those more - appreciate it...


and u...

no problem man, lol, not everyone is gonna like it, or feel it...
but thanks for your honest opinion.
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Re: I Promise

Postby Solace » Dec 5th, '09, 02:50

Spyder wrote:wasnt feeling this piece at all bro not gonna lie
i saw only two multies, and never felt the emotion in a piece that its supposed to be evident

just my honest opinion

I agree completely with Spyder. You have a lot to work on :y:
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Re: I Promise

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 5th, '09, 09:35

^ yeah man gotta say pretty basic. But I suppose writing a letter to ya chica doesnt have to be full of multies ya know
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Re: I Promise

Postby gutawafang » Dec 5th, '09, 10:14

I did like it. Pretty good to me man. Welcome to the forum.
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Re: I Promise

Postby j2dat » Dec 6th, '09, 03:44

thanks :)

i appreciate all the feed.. i know i got some work to do.

Yah-hah wrote:^ yeah man gotta say pretty basic. But I suppose writing a letter to ya chica doesnt have to be full of multies ya know


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She sat Kanye West down, and talked about his crash
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