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Mellow Stuff

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Mellow Stuff

Postby Rain Matrix » Nov 21st, '09, 20:48

I used to worry about how things would Turn Out
but I've Learned How not to be so Concerned Now

it's just gonna be a Headache on the Next Day
hungover like a drunk soldier trying to Supress Rage

fighting a war I Can't Win I've reached an Understanding
all this back and forth shit doesn't mean a Damn Thing

where will it Lead You besides being completely See Through
you Need To Seek Truth and realize you'll never get a Redo

is the life you Want or do you dream of something Else
one day it'll be Gone and you'll only be able to blame Yourself

I kill my pain with Songs and send it right back to Hell
it's like using Napalm to make all of your discrestion Melt

untill your Mind Snaps and you swear you can see Time Pass
as your memory Rewinds Back to When you wanted this to End

but it Never Did so you decide not to Trust Your Fear
thinking would it be Better If you said fuck it and drank Another Beer
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Re: Mellow Stuff

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 21st, '09, 21:34

Good shit dope drop but the capital letters thing was kind of annoying....I like just reading it and finding th multis for my self you know but good drop, keep it up
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Re: Mellow Stuff

Postby Solace » Dec 15th, '09, 04:06

Forrreal dope..Loved it :y:
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Re: Mellow Stuff

Postby -[Zach]- » Dec 15th, '09, 12:06

i really liked this. i don't know if its because i find myself feeling like that alot these days or what but i thought this was a really deep piece. you called it Mellow Stuff but to me it kind of has a dark, hopeless feeling. maybe thats just me though. anyways nice multi's, tight flow, and deep thoughts. keep it up.
"Did you ever stop to think/I'm old enough to go to war but I ain't old enough to drink" - 2Pac

"It's time to let the truth be told/There ain't no brighter day/'Cause when it all unfolds/A n**** gon' just pass away/These haters tryna stop my grind/But I bet them hoes can't block my shine/So tired of takin' losses not this time/I can't save the whole world I'm just tryna look out for mine" - Z-Ro

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