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New Verse.. Personal Type shit. Peep if u can..

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Re: New Verse.. Personal Type shit. Peep if u can..

Postby classthe_king » Dec 18th, '09, 02:22

Boston wrote:
classthe_king wrote:I thought this was dope. This part would sound great rapped.

bring us closer, holding hands, baby im the only man/
who will take his coat n pants, off and in the cold i stand/
freezing just to make you laugh, the reason i just make it past/
all the bullshit, your the reason and i just cant change the fact/

Can't wait to get to hear something from you.


oh no u never heard my audio?!


nah lol, i just started checking the audio section recently and you havent posted anything in a while.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: New Verse.. Personal Type shit. Peep if u can..

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 18th, '09, 02:56

The lyricism is too straightforward and simple for my taste, but it was a solid piece overall.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: New Verse.. Personal Type shit. Peep if u can..

Postby Boston » Dec 18th, '09, 04:39

Relapse.LP wrote:The lyricism is too straightforward and simple for my taste, but it was a solid piece overall.


good looks bro, i can agree why u thought that. i tend to dumb things downa bit for these type of songs. but thanks
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