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Testing the Waters

Postby FAME » Jan 2nd, '10, 08:58

Wanna hear my life story, purgatory that I feel to the end of the day
I always seem to feel betrayed, because I don’t know the trick of the trade
Fuck these rules, I’ll school you in the game cause I won’t be played
As I touch the end of the blade, I start to feel my life’s crusade
I wanna be up to par, and break down the bar and make the grade
In my head I feel this pain, and the struggles seem to pierce my brain
My entire life is pushed together, stuck forever like a busy traffic lane
I guess I was put here to entertain, because these thoughts I can’t explain
I’m stuck to fame it’s my domain, I’m connect to it with a ball and chain
Pushing myself is so inhumane, but I have to persuade like an ad campaign
And all these fucking pricks, who keep pretending they aren’t sucking dicks
In my mind I have these rhyming ticks, it’s my drug and I’m losing my fix


I tried to take alot of feedback from people, I do believe I still need help. But am I getting any better? I took the suggestion that I got to write down different lines that rhymed together like

End of the day
Feel betrayed
Trick of the trade
Won’t be played
I have prayed
Make the grade
End of the blade
Life’s crusade

I think I'm doing this right, I even tried to put some internal rhymes in it. :sweating:
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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 2nd, '10, 09:59

Think I suggested that lol. Sick yo for real. Your gettin better pretty fast ma. Mad props
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby FAME » Jan 2nd, '10, 10:20

:shocked2: I DID IT RIGHT?
omg omg omg
I'm freaking out right now.
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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 2nd, '10, 10:44

LMAO yeah it was sick ma
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby FAME » Jan 2nd, '10, 10:50

Yah-hah wrote:LMAO yeah it was sick ma


YES! I would go crazy all over the CW section with a bunch of stuff, but I'm trying to also start in the audio section... :shifty:

after I get my mic :angry:
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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 2nd, '10, 10:58

Yeah same here lol
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby FAME » Jan 2nd, '10, 11:01

Yah-hah audio?
I can't wait for some of that :y:
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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 2nd, '10, 11:02

Gettin better Fame... Yea the multis need a bit more work but you're definately getting it
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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby FAME » Jan 2nd, '10, 11:06

Fa-Q wrote:Gettin better Fame... Yea the multis need a bit more work but you're definately getting it


Thanks man, I never even knew mulits existed before I came to TR. Man am I glad you guys showed me the way. I need to find my dictionary to get my vocab a little better, so I cam make really good mulits. :y:
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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 2nd, '10, 11:10

Yeah after awhile them multis will seem natural and flow so smooth. Just keep writing and you'll be good
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 2nd, '10, 11:16

Yea that's all me and Yah do cause once you start doing it...you can stop

Multis=heroin
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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 2nd, '10, 11:17

Amen brother :smoking:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby Ms. Lunaverse » Jan 3rd, '10, 11:11

Woah little mama droppin some fire. We gotta collab girl! Nice multis too :flower:
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The truth? resumed in my doom when I inhaled too soon"
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Re: Testing the Waters

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 3rd, '10, 13:01

Ms. Lunaverse wrote:Woah little mama droppin some fire. We gotta collab girl! Nice multis too :flower:


:o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :o
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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