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3 stooges (5 star general diss)

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Re: 3 stooges (5 star general diss)

Postby Spyder » Jan 4th, '10, 00:53

to me this diss wasnt much man, no hate even tho we beefin
there wasnt to many punches or personals, i mean relating me to a jacket is exactly jaw droppin yaknow?

punches and personals are the most important in a diss
yours lacked here

there was basic rhyming, and skimpy multies
multies arnt that important... ONCE you have them down as second nature
not really any wordplay in there, though this one was better than the other diss you dropped
your getting better :y:

study other peoples shit, but NEVER bite or steal their style
just gotta see HOW they do it

coleon suggested the feed/cypher and all those, ive only honestly been in that one
only a couple times. and look at me, got it from studying :y:
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Re: 3 stooges (5 star general diss)

Postby Edge » Jan 4th, '10, 01:10

Yah-hah wrote:Was actually really suprised how dope it was. A few really good line. Zu who lmao. Good one though man you getter alot better


thanks man :y:
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Re: 3 stooges (5 star general diss)

Postby Solace » Jan 4th, '10, 01:10

Coleon wrote:
The Edge wrote:
bullet_boy46 wrote::worship: bump :whistle:


haha word, no1s responding to this one


I'm afraid... this lyrical insanity has made me shit, piss, and puke simultaneously in fear

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Re: 3 stooges (5 star general diss)

Postby Edge » Jan 4th, '10, 01:12

Spyder wrote:to me this diss wasnt much man, no hate even tho we beefin
there wasnt to many punches or personals, i mean relating me to a jacket is exactly jaw droppin yaknow?

punches and personals are the most important in a diss
yours lacked here

there was basic rhyming, and skimpy multies
multies arnt that important... ONCE you have them down as second nature
not really any wordplay in there, though this one was better than the other diss you dropped
your getting better :y:

study other peoples shit, but NEVER bite or steal their style
just gotta see HOW they do it

coleon suggested the feed/cypher and all those, ive only honestly been in that one
only a couple times. and look at me, got it from studying :y:



thanks for the feed man, idk anything about u or zu, thats y i didnt have much to work with so i figured id do what i could... and now that F&F/the beef is done, maybe we could do a colab sometime... and dont worry about biting, i do my thing and respect others own thing, i wouldnt try to be someone im not
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em
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Re: 3 stooges (5 star general diss)

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 4th, '10, 03:42

Yeah I think The Edge deserves more credit yall :y:
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With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: 3 stooges (5 star general diss)

Postby gutawafang » Jan 4th, '10, 05:17

not bad. :y:
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Re: 3 stooges (5 star general diss)

Postby Edge » Jan 4th, '10, 07:28

thanks gutawafang and yah-hah :y:
imma b dropping one in a couple minutes, id appreciate feed if u got time
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Re: 3 stooges (5 star general diss)

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 4th, '10, 07:33

I'll check it out homie no worries
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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