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McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby Maybe » Mar 14th, '11, 21:10

Down for editing.

I review quite a bit (in the past, and more recently).

here's proof people: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=109686
Last edited by Maybe on Mar 15th, '11, 22:41, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby Steve Spag » Mar 14th, '11, 22:48

Glad to see you havn't lost your touch!
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby Block » Mar 15th, '11, 03:58

You know my thoughts on this, bro. It's gonna make a dope song.
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby Robbie G » Mar 15th, '11, 05:21

That's awesome, like almost everything I've read from you.

Are you ever going to release any audio?
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby Maybe » Mar 15th, '11, 17:19

Robbie G wrote:That's awesome, like almost everything I've read from you.

Are you ever going to release any audio?


Thanks man! Me & kblock are currently writing, producing and recording an EP. It shouldn't be long before it's done, because this time around I have him to push me in the direction of completion.

@Steve: Thanks, gladly I can say the same about you.

@Krys: Of course man, it'll be sick.
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby Maybe » Mar 15th, '11, 22:42

I never do this, but seriously: bump! :y:
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby TheGreatest » Mar 16th, '11, 01:02

Wow, that was an extremely delectable read. It's indubitable that you and K Block have betided your styles together and it works. You are easily the most proficient writers on this site and if the EP is completely it will be superb.
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby gutawafang » Mar 16th, '11, 10:20

Love it man. The flow and the rhyme scheme... perfect. :y:
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby Maybe » Mar 18th, '11, 08:19

TheGreatest wrote:Wow, that was an extremely delectable read. It's indubitable that you and K Block have betided your styles together and it works. You are easily the most proficient writers on this site and if the EP is completely it will be superb.


Thanks man, I'm glad you think so. :y:


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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby mcZu » Mar 18th, '11, 18:21

You changed your writing style a bit, right, Maybe?

It seems like your writing has more melody in it than ever. Your writing used to be just poetic and lyrical, but this, even not recorded, sounded very melodic in my head while I was reading it.

The concept wasn't really unique, but that doesn't take away the fact that the song is written well. Good job.
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby Maybe » Mar 18th, '11, 19:20

mcZu wrote:You changed your writing style a bit, right, Maybe?

It seems like your writing has more melody in it than ever. Your writing used to be just poetic and lyrical, but this, even not recorded, sounded very melodic in my head while I was reading it.

The concept wasn't really unique, but that doesn't take away the fact that the song is written well. Good job.


Thanks bro, I was a bit tired of the overly complex conceptual pieces I'm used to. As you can see from my other verse, I'm trying a more basic/simpler approach to writing for now.

Appreciate the feedback.
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby Wallace » Mar 19th, '11, 01:43

When i'm goin to review lyrics, I usually read 'em hearin' a beat. In that case I didn't use cuz I imagined that a slow mental declaim would make it sound better.
I thought of it it judging by the chorus i looked quickly.

And it did. Real good lyrics, from good to flawless from the beginin to the end in all worthy aspects, like message, choice of words and flow.
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby classthe_king » Mar 24th, '11, 01:26

If you and Siinide don't start recording soon I'm going to fly to where ever you live, tie you up, put the mic in front of your faces and force you to record.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby Block » Mar 24th, '11, 02:53

classthe_king wrote:If you and Siinide don't start recording soon I'm going to fly to where ever you live, tie you up, put the mic in front of your faces and force you to record.


Lmao. That's almost sig worthy. :laughing:
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Re: McMaybe - Famous In My Heart

Postby Maybe » Mar 24th, '11, 04:35

Done for principle.
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