NEW - Lyrical Takeover (REVISING)

[Solace]

RAWRBLEH.

[Verse 1]
The perfect creation, it was called a masterpiece,
Epiphany, attacking the weak, a fuckin' catastrophe,
All of you emcees could never rap like me,
Attract like me, fuck y'all can't even act like me,
Rhymes going fast indeed on this mad piece,
Finish the rest of your careers, at last it's peace,
With your sorrows, sad grief and mad beefs,
You got another thing coming your way, yea that's me,
Lyricism and wordplay trapped in my cranium,
More sick than drinking a can of uranium,
My rhymes are lines containing a disaster of spirits,
Emotional or funny, I'm still the master of lyrics.

[Chorus x2]
These are simply lyrics on a higher level,
Try to battle, these lyrical knives will sever,
Exceeding expectations, my lines got a make-over,
Now prepare to face a lyrical takeover.

[Verse 2]
Had losses, still losing and i take it like a man,
Ego tripping? No, I actually stay who I am,
Rhymes used to be oblique, now they're consistent,
Been beaten by bitches but I'm still persistent,
You're lyricism is distant, you have no kismet,
I'm twisting your rhymes so much they ain't existing,
The master of lyrics' words are deleterious,
Never lie to my friends so they speak with trust,
If you think you're beating us you gunna be sundered,
You'll be beat with more than just words hurting like thunder.

[Chorus x2]

[Emadyville]

well done, very well done

[Solace]

well done, very well done

Wow really? Thanks

[notoriouS-K-M]

yeah dude it's good.....i liked it...................wasn't feeling the chorus that much though.

[Solace]

Thanks guys, glad you liked it, ill try to fix up the hook and finish the 2nd verse later today or tommorow. I know ive done well when McMaybe says its good

[Slim Zaddy]

i liked verse 1 , i think it was good though .. great job here dude.. 8 / 10 .. waiting for verse 2 .. nd for the chorus it was very nice man .. keep it up ..

[Solace]

i liked verse 1 , i think it was good though .. great job here dude.. 8 / 10 .. waiting for verse 2 .. nd for the chorus it was very nice man .. keep it up ..

Thanks man, glad you liked the verse & chorus.

[Rain Matrix]

definitly recordable... I liked it alot, not much else to say other than fluent rhymign ability

[Solace]

definitly recordable... I liked it alot, not much else to say other than fluent rhymign ability

Means a lot coming from you, thanks man

[Solace]

Finished it, and im still thinking of how to revise the chorus.

Please feed people!

[Requiem]

good job man, ur best drop in a while verse 1 i had no complaints, i mean the flow was perfect, and i was feeling the subject/rhymes.
verse 2 wasn't as good as 1, but was still cool. was perfect up to the "aint existing" line. i think "existant" would sound better. and u need to revise the lines after that

hook was meh
8/10, has a nice feel to it. definitely recordable, chock that one up for ur tape reminds me of soon you'll see for some reason. just that laid back, lyrical feel.

damn i liked it. lmao, no more to say

[Solace]

good job man, ur best drop in a while verse 1 i had no complaints, i mean the flow was perfect, and i was feeling the subject/rhymes.
verse 2 wasn't as good as 1, but was still cool. was perfect up to the "aint existing" line. i think "existant" would sound better. and u need to revise the lines after that

hook was meh
8/10, has a nice feel to it. definitely recordable, chock that one up for ur tape reminds me of soon you'll see for some reason. just that laid back, lyrical feel.

damn i liked it. lmao, no more to say

Thanks, glad you liked it. Since you say the last 2 lines arent that good, is this revised verse 2 better?

Had losses, still losing and i take it like a man,
Ego tripping? No, I actually stay who I am,
Rhymes used to be oblique, now they're consistent,
Been beaten by bitches but I'm still persistent,
You're lyricism is distant, you have no kismet,
I'm twisting your rhymes so much they ain't existent,
The words coming out my mouth are deleterious,
"Please don't! I love you," here comes the kissing up,
My elocution of writing is quite exciting,
Won't be soon till you underground rappers biting.

[Solace]

lmao thanks glad you liked it, i have no clue on how to do the chorus so im still thinking you know? Glad you liked the opening.

[Slim Zaddy]

verse 2 was good but not as verse 1 .. but it was good in terms of rhymes , lyrics nd flow ,, so it' was good . overall .. 7.5/ for verse 2 . but i think it will be a nice song if you record it ..

[Solace]

Thanks