Like yeast I rise

[Purple23Haze]

Like yeast I rise up, you surprised uhn?
“I’m a beast” the beez neez this comes easy to me
Blow me like the breeze shhweee, you like should we?
All the haters feeds the creator
the maker…of rhymes the one behind what you think is whiskey rye
like a chaser justice and crime jail house raper chasin paper eattin you pussies like cappers
Both your lips gossip the one you talk wit and take cock wit
talking piss you think I’m pist you wish that's jibberish
You think you could make me angry dog this is who I am praise be Allah
I’m the guy who is right I am what I am Popeye
A menace like Denis reminisce never forget to eat my spinach
Endless like time til the ending ends I end with a rhyme
I'm the original subliminal criminal dropppin plain and simple
No innuendos well that all depends yo on what kinda ties you make on them loose ends so
You average standard automatic if you was a car you'd be a rental causin' traffic
I'm like a tire with attraction to street you like rest in peace deceased and dead to me

[Ka0t1c]

it's ur best i've seen by far, most things are spelled correctly 6/10

[Purple23Haze]

it's ur best i've seen by far, most things are spelled correctly 6/10

seriously stop talkin' bout spellin' shit correctly I have a college degree and this is creative writing it sounds like it is spelled thank you though and keep hatin' I love it

[James R.]

I didn't like it at all. Flow was non-existent, rhymes were basic as hell, I never know what you mean when you put things in quotes. Like is it wordplay? A metaphor? What the hell is it? I thought the entire thing was weak, but this line was by FAR the weakest.

Blow me like the breeze shhweee, you like should we?

I mean did you REALLY spell the breeze noise? You always look cooler when you use real words.

[Solace]

That was trash. Like fucking trash. Yes, dont even say "keep talking! keep hating" cause you know I will. Get better before you post trash.

[Purple23Haze]

That was trash. Like fucking trash. Yes, dont even say "keep talking! keep hating" cause you know I will. Get better before you post trash.

You're right I do know and yo I do flow so shut the fuck up and let these go
SPELL WORDS CORRECTLY STRUCTURE GARBAGE TRASH don't you know I react
what the fuck is up we're bout to slash fur on vinyl I'm disturbed like tribal
Nine full inches of dick would shut your mouth lip it quick
Keep it comin; I keep stunnin' blood in my force out
Into the universe I still shout we still bout now WHAT
chiken butt now who chicken poo now we chicken pee
now why a chicken pie now guess I made chick a mess!!!
N yes I'm blessed BLESS'id lets stress him

[Solace]

im confused, was that a paragraph or a verse

[Purple23Haze]

im confused, was that a paragraph or a verse

I don't "C" that it really matters it's a motha fuckin' song if you want

[Solace]

im confused, was that a paragraph or a verse

I don't "C" that it really matters it's a motha fuckin' song if you want

im sorry but i think you should make each line rhyme first.

[Purple23Haze]

im confused, was that a paragraph or a verse

I don't "C" that it really matters it's a motha fuckin' song if you want

im sorry but i think you should make each line rhyme first.

I honestly don't have the time to write every line with an every rhyme put it together, Like I never understood why you people couldn't read the goods, never! it's not a could I would should I fly into the universe where I could die cause look guy I don't shug knight I don't book write I don't look like the white freeway I'm the he say she say!!!great I am great any way I am we say he strayed from the path of land never spoke to the last of fans why can't you comprehend what I'm sayin like yo motha fucka I have no delay an I have no kleeshays water damned

How do yo u spell cleshay?

[ThomasAguanis]

you should structure your lines instead of keeping them in paragraph form. It would make them a whole lot easier to read. With that said, your stuff is alright but very hard to follow.

[neversnooze]

like yeast i rise, the idea sounds good but the verse was horrible. i thought you would place baker or bakery in your verse in which you didnt.

keep working on it bro and if you dont have the time to rhyme each line, then you dont have the time to write a verse pe@ce

[Purple23Haze]

you should structure your lines instead of keeping them in paragraph form. It would make them a whole lot easier to read. With that said, your stuff is alright but very hard to follow.

For real Tom I didn't know
look yo I'm fukin the kittens so
please read O-ALL before postin taller
big baller

[ThomasAguanis]

right

[neversnooze]

you should structure your lines instead of keeping them in paragraph form. It would make them a whole lot easier to read. With that said, your stuff is alright but very hard to follow.

For real Tom I didn't know
look yo I'm fukin the kittens so
please read O-ALL before postin taller
big baller

right

i dont get it lol