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Im Pissed Off!

Postby lilrossy » Nov 8th, '09, 10:29

pissed off like a shit stain in a toilet bowl,
ya'll fools gold fuckin faggots beta jus fold,
dis da real shit, aint down wiv it, get enrolled,
when u write my name, make sure those letters are bold,
uppercased and underlined, dis game is mine,
its thunder time, a storms cummin, run and hide,
dangerous and unkind, im in the wrong state of mind,
me bein equiped wiv a mic is like havin a gun to fire,
i spit shots and rock spots, i dont giv a fuck,
when shit stops i get props, dis kid dont suck,
ima mean young buck, but a renowned kinda guy,
but that can meen 2 different things, like a brown eye,
yeah i found christ, and i flipped him the fuckin bird,
thanx for this life, he said go to hell and fuckin burn,
wat was that, naah fuck that, thats it, uurrr dead,
took off his sandals and paddled his fuckin forehead.
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby Solace » Nov 8th, '09, 21:48

Was iight...Very simple, only lines I actually liked here were:

when u write my name, make sure those letters are bold,
uppercased and underlined, dis game is mine,

But other than that this was pretty blah. You've written way better before.

Ending was pretty funny tho. Keep at it.
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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby lilrossy » Nov 9th, '09, 07:52

aight kewl, thanx for the feedbak man.
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby macdaddy019967 » Nov 9th, '09, 07:56

my answer to you is get laid and it should help out you being pissed off
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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby lilrossy » Nov 9th, '09, 08:17

:laughing: that was a good one.
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby gutawafang » Nov 9th, '09, 09:29

It's good man.

pissed off like a shit stain in a toilet bowl,
ya'll fools gold fuckin faggots beta jus fold,
dis da real shit, aint down wiv it, get enrolled,
when u write my name, make sure those letters are bold,
uppercased and underlined, dis game is mine,
its thunder time, a storms cummin, run and hide,

the rest was not that good man. prolly not my cup of tea that's all. no offense. but that part i quoted is nice. :)
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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Nov 9th, '09, 17:16

Daaaaaamn! Whooo! Show these wack fuckers who's the shit! Yeah! :worship: :worship: :worship: :worship:
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby D'Leh » Nov 9th, '09, 21:02

Simple but funny shit! great piece homie! :y:
Let me eat your pussy while I shave you!
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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby lilrossy » Nov 10th, '09, 07:33

D'Leh wrote:Simple but funny shit! great piece homie! :y:

thanx :D

eminemgirl1234 wrote:Daaaaaamn! Whooo! Show these wack fuckers who's the shit! Yeah! :worship: :worship: :worship: :worship:

haha, thanx. :D
and i will continue too. :smoking:

gutawafang wrote:It's good man.

pissed off like a shit stain in a toilet bowl,
ya'll fools gold fuckin faggots beta jus fold,
dis da real shit, aint down wiv it, get enrolled,
when u write my name, make sure those letters are bold,
uppercased and underlined, dis game is mine,
its thunder time, a storms cummin, run and hide,

the rest was not that good man. prolly not my cup of tea that's all. no offense. but that part i quoted is nice. :)

Aight, kewl man, thanx for the feedbak. :happy:
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 10th, '09, 09:08

Yeah man like they said kinda basic but I laughed a couple times. Good stuff though homie
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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby lilrossy » Nov 10th, '09, 09:13

thanx man, appreciate it. :y:
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Nov 12th, '09, 16:37

Are you Eminem? :p
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

"Ignorance is your new best friend!"-Paramore
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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby lilrossy » Nov 13th, '09, 00:21

umm... no :shifty:
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Nov 13th, '09, 16:30

you sure?
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

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Re: Im Pissed Off!

Postby lilrossy » Nov 14th, '09, 02:44

okay u got me, i've been exposed.
but dont tell anyone. :-$
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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