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My freestyle

Postby shadyfreakzul » Feb 13th, '10, 17:28

wrote this on D.O.A beat just some few lines...not complete though.Feedback apreciated.


spit flows on my chin call me moron
am a beast in the bible have got 4 horns
spit flows on my chin am a retard
with insane lyrics call me bizarre
i kill djs on their own beat
and bury rappers on their own shit
this aint no joke u gotta trust me
or i'ma beat your ass like a jealous HusB
coming out from another planet
while ***** starve like their mother planned it
make them loose weight like the sauna
make them loo like they were starved by thier mama
hit you with sick flows till your head burst
beefing with me is like em beefing with fred durst.
I'm strong, my word is Bond like James
Niggaz be tryin to test, but they 'week' like seven days-Canibus

I don't belong here,my dad fucked my mom in the wrong year.-Budden

like taekwondo you lack punches-Shadyfreakzul

Around here i am the Goat like the Capricorn.-Wale
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Re: My freestyle

Postby shadyfreakzul » Feb 14th, '10, 17:03

common guys feed back.
I'm strong, my word is Bond like James
Niggaz be tryin to test, but they 'week' like seven days-Canibus

I don't belong here,my dad fucked my mom in the wrong year.-Budden

like taekwondo you lack punches-Shadyfreakzul

Around here i am the Goat like the Capricorn.-Wale
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Re: My freestyle

Postby Element. » Feb 14th, '10, 19:48

I dont think you want feed tbh ;)
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Re: My freestyle

Postby Solace » Feb 15th, '10, 03:25

Smithy wrote:I dont think you want feed tbh ;)

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Re: My freestyle

Postby shadyfreakzul » Feb 15th, '10, 20:04

Smithy wrote:I dont think you want feed tbh ;)

whats tbh?
I'm strong, my word is Bond like James
Niggaz be tryin to test, but they 'week' like seven days-Canibus

I don't belong here,my dad fucked my mom in the wrong year.-Budden

like taekwondo you lack punches-Shadyfreakzul

Around here i am the Goat like the Capricorn.-Wale
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Re: My freestyle

Postby Solace » Feb 15th, '10, 20:12

To be honest.
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Re: My freestyle

Postby shadyfreakzul » Feb 15th, '10, 20:20

ok thanks smithy
I'm strong, my word is Bond like James
Niggaz be tryin to test, but they 'week' like seven days-Canibus

I don't belong here,my dad fucked my mom in the wrong year.-Budden

like taekwondo you lack punches-Shadyfreakzul

Around here i am the Goat like the Capricorn.-Wale
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Re: My freestyle

Postby classthe_king » Feb 15th, '10, 20:27

Don't worry keep writing and you'll get better :y: It wasn't even that bad. If you keep writing you'll get as good as smithy, maybe. I mean just by looking at his sig I can see how good of a writer smithy is.


























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You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: My freestyle

Postby Element. » Feb 15th, '10, 21:02

Lol :( thanks Classic being sarcastic
anyway yeah didnt mean it in a bad way its just what everyone use to say to me but keep doin ya thing and you'll get there.
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Re: My freestyle

Postby shadyfreakzul » Feb 15th, '10, 21:22

classthe_king wrote:Don't worry keep writing and you'll get better :y: It wasn't even that bad. If you keep writing you'll get as good as smithy, maybe. I mean just by looking at his sig I can see how good of a writer smithySMITHY IS NOT THAT GOOD I KNOW HIS POTENTIAL.TALKING OF BEING SOMEONE ON THIS SITE I WOULD GO FOR AME.SMITHY'S WACK. :laughing: :laughing:

























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Niggaz be tryin to test, but they 'week' like seven days-Canibus

I don't belong here,my dad fucked my mom in the wrong year.-Budden

like taekwondo you lack punches-Shadyfreakzul

Around here i am the Goat like the Capricorn.-Wale
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Postby Element. » Feb 15th, '10, 21:28

? not sayin anythin else shadyfreakzul. just a quote
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Re: My freestyle

Postby shadyfreakzul » Feb 15th, '10, 22:07

Smithy wrote:? not sayin anythin else shadyfreakzul. just a quote

CHECK IN THE QUOTE RETARD!!!!! MY LINES ARE IN CAPS.
I'm strong, my word is Bond like James
Niggaz be tryin to test, but they 'week' like seven days-Canibus

I don't belong here,my dad fucked my mom in the wrong year.-Budden

like taekwondo you lack punches-Shadyfreakzul

Around here i am the Goat like the Capricorn.-Wale
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Postby Element. » Feb 15th, '10, 22:25

shadyfreakzul wrote:
Smithy wrote:? not sayin anythin else shadyfreakzul. just a quote

CHECK IN THE QUOTE RETARD!!!!! MY LINES ARE IN CAPS.



Calm your shit down, i may be wack but my shits good enough to beat you, fuckin' faggot
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Re: My freestyle

Postby shadyfreakzul » Feb 15th, '10, 22:33

Smithy wrote:
shadyfreakzul wrote:
Smithy wrote:? not sayin anythin else shadyfreakzul. just a quote

CHECK IN THE QUOTE RETARD!!!!! MY LINES ARE IN CAPS.



Calm your shit down, i may be wack but my shits good enough to beat you, fuckin' faggot

BECUASE U WON ME IN ABATTLE DOESNT MEAN U BETTER.I KNOW WHAT YOU CAN DO.SIMPLE AS ABC U NOT GOOD ENOUGH.WHY CALL ME A FAGGOT? WHAT I SAID HURT?
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Niggaz be tryin to test, but they 'week' like seven days-Canibus

I don't belong here,my dad fucked my mom in the wrong year.-Budden

like taekwondo you lack punches-Shadyfreakzul

Around here i am the Goat like the Capricorn.-Wale
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Re: My freestyle

Postby FAME » Feb 15th, '10, 22:36

Well I'll be honest here...some of it didn't even rhyme :unsure:
But I'm glad that the CW has more people dropping, hopefully if your really into it some of the vets can help you.

@ the thread though.... :laughing:
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