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Re: Welcome Home Matt

Postby WakeUpShow » Jan 20th, '11, 01:58

classthe_king wrote:Ummmmm it was pretty good, nothing great though. You need more imagery in a story telling piece, something I also suffer with. Look up the Sniper and look up the feed K Block gave me, that should help. I don't really understand the ending also.

+I don't really know how to explain the ending. It's like his troubles followed him home, and basically hit home, burned down his house. it goes deeper but I can't explain. Also the Welcome Home Mat/ Matt was basically supposed to be like sarcastic, like see what you did?
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Re: Welcome Home Matt

Postby classthe_king » Jan 20th, '11, 02:54

I don't know why him returning would make the house burn down or what his pin laying on the matt has to do with it.

You could have ended it much better.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Welcome Home Matt

Postby WakeUpShow » Jan 20th, '11, 03:11

classthe_king wrote:I don't know why him returning would make the house burn down or what his pin laying on the matt has to do with it.

You could have ended it much better.

can you check out my "Blank" piece. i think it is much better.
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