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Ego - You

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Re: Ego - You

Postby Mr.DGAF » Sep 19th, '11, 23:58

Geno wrote:Tbh, I think "You" is better than "End Of The Tunnel" :y:



Yeah, I started feeding it then remembered that I think bumping a thread that's two or more months old is bad or something, so I didn't.

Basically all that was said was that Geno's verse was solid as always, though the verse for this one is better.


And Menzo's verse was good, but it's apparent how much he has grown as a writer since that peice. Not to say that it's a bad verse at all, because it isn't. You've just become a better writer since that spot.
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: Ego - You

Postby Man1x » Sep 20th, '11, 02:25

It was all dope I really don't see anything wrong. I still maintain ya'll need to record these. Geno had the upper hand as always, but Menzo I think your getting up and fast. Even though your verse wasn't the best I liked this part the most on the whole thing, I guess I liked the fast flow:
"I wanna dedicate this song
To one who’s never hated on
An idea or a thought
That's created outta love
Created outta anger, “don’t hesitate the tongue”
You helped my levitation from"

I thought that was dope with imagery and all bro :y:
Good job Ego, can't wait to see more

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