Desperadoes - Apocalypse

[Eedee]

This is my joy I planned to assume the place of many
Eager to destroy the planet if the human race is ready

Dat multi...

CP, this was awesome. Nice flow, rhyming and concept. You pulled this off extremely well.

PK came in with shorter bars but I still got the flow. Rhyming wasn't the best on this. But your flow and content was cool.

And out of nowhere, TRex and I are mentioned. lol

[PAINKILLƎR]

This is my joy I planned to assume the place of many
Eager to destroy the planet if the human race is ready

Dat multi...

CP, this was awesome. Nice flow, rhyming and concept. You pulled this off extremely well.

PK came in with shorter bars but I still got the flow. Rhyming wasn't the best on this. But your flow and content was cool.

And out of nowhere, TRex and I are mentioned. lol

Duuuhh you obviously didn't get it... thanks for the feed though , my rhyming sucks I always get criticized for that shit lol

[Eedee]

This is my joy I planned to assume the place of many
Eager to destroy the planet if the human race is ready

Dat multi...

CP, this was awesome. Nice flow, rhyming and concept. You pulled this off extremely well.

PK came in with shorter bars but I still got the flow. Rhyming wasn't the best on this. But your flow and content was cool.

And out of nowhere, TRex and I are mentioned. lol

Duuuhh you obviously didn't get it... thanks for the feed though , my rhyming sucks I always get criticized for that shit lol

WAHHHHHH WTF YO

[PAINKILLƎR]

It was a joke

[Eedee]

Says you. I'm so incredibly butthurt right now, brah. Kiss it better.

[PAINKILLƎR]

Bruh, your writing capabilities and comprehension are mind-blowingly good that when we collab I feel like shit because my work can't compete. The same with CP, but with you it's a bit more...

[Eedee]

Bruh, your writing capabilities and comprehension are mind-blowingly good that when we collab I feel like shit because my work can't compete. The same with CP, but with you it's a bit more...

That's not what I meant. I wanted you to literally kiss my ass better.

But still.

[PAINKILLƎR]

CP helps me out though when we work together, he gives me suggestions, reviews my work to see if there is room for improvement...

maybe you should do the same

[Eedee]

BOY. I fucking asked you to send me the shit so I could help but you never did.

[PAINKILLƎR]

No you just hurry me to drop the song, so everyone can see your badass verse while people laugh at my verse

[Eedee]

You know what you do with learning how to rhyme? Just take a three syllable word and rhyme the fuck out of it. Sit there until you have like 10 things to rhyme with it. Once yo uhave that you can model your verse to fit them in there. Here's what I did with a song I'm writing. I wanted to talk about a lonely man, so I took "lonely man", sat down and started writing rhymes to it. I got these (and I can probably think of more if I give it the proper time):

lonely man
hold his hand
soda can
home, his dad
open gash (you can sorta switch it up to make it easier to think of shit)
broken glass
throw to smash
ghosts his past
sofa fast
clothes are rags
note attached

Break down each syllable.

lone-ly-man

Think about the way it's supposed to be delivered. Here, the second syllable isn't stressed so it's okay to change it up a little bit. So you think about what rhymes with the first and third syllables.

lone rhymes with a ton of shit, right?
man rhymes with a lot too.

Once you do that you take those two, see if you can make anything out of it and put in a filler word to match the syllables up.

Soon you'll have a multi-laden verse.

It works for me. I hope I made some sort of sense.

QFTMFT

[CanadaPure]

This is my joy I planned to assume the place of many
Eager to destroy the planet if the human race is ready

Dat multi...

CP, this was awesome. Nice flow, rhyming and concept. You pulled this off extremely well.

PK came in with shorter bars but I still got the flow. Rhyming wasn't the best on this. But your flow and content was cool.

And out of nowhere, TRex and I are mentioned. lol

Think about it doe:
Sanatorium = 4 People
Get two more ride in like four horsemen: Me and Pain + You and TRex = 4 horseman
4 horsemen are also the sign of the world ending.

[PAINKILLƎR]

You know what you do with learning how to rhyme? Just take a three syllable word and rhyme the fuck out of it. Sit there until you have like 10 things to rhyme with it. Once yo uhave that you can model your verse to fit them in there. Here's what I did with a song I'm writing. I wanted to talk about a lonely man, so I took "lonely man", sat down and started writing rhymes to it. I got these (and I can probably think of more if I give it the proper time):

lonely man
hold his hand
soda can
home, his dad
open gash (you can sorta switch it up to make it easier to think of shit)
broken glass
throw to smash
ghosts his past
sofa fast
clothes are rags
note attached

Break down each syllable.

lone-ly-man

Think about the way it's supposed to be delivered. Here, the second syllable isn't stressed so it's okay to change it up a little bit. So you think about what rhymes with the first and third syllables.

lone rhymes with a ton of shit, right?
man rhymes with a lot too.

Once you do that you take those two, see if you can make anything out of it and put in a filler word to match the syllables up.

Soon you'll have a multi-laden verse.

It works for me. I hope I made some sort of sense.

demon/free them
aid the flood/raining blood
and possessed it/manifested/and ingest it/til I'm tested

I had some though...

[CanadaPure]

Pain and I are kinda like 50 and Em tbh. He keeps me on topic, and I help make rhyme suggestions. Pains certainly improved a lot though I'll continue working with him until I say "FUCK THIS FORUM" and leave.

[Eedee]

Think about it doe:
Sanatorium = 4 People
Get two more ride in like four horsemen: Me and Pain + You and TRex = 4 horseman
4 horsemen are also the sign of the world ending.