NEW - Problems (Revising)

[Requiem]

^ i agree with mcmaybe on this one. flow was off on that one short line in verse 2. but i enjoyed it immensely as well.

mcmaybe commented

[Steve Spag]

I actually liked the 2nd verse a lot better than the 1st. Deep situation, and you presented it well with your words. There are some parts that still need fixing, but I'm sure you'll figure it out. The Hook could do with some work too, my reccomendation would be to shorten it up, some lines have too many words and it throws the flow off (unless I'm reading it the wrong way, and if that's true, sorry, haha).

Keep it up man.

[Nizar]

it's pretty good man, the flow's good. keep it up dude.

[Solace]

I don't post here often... but...

I liked it. The concept was pretty good, and the lyrics themselves weren't bad at all. Definitely enjoyable. I would try to fix the structure before you record this If I were you, because the only flaw is the flow occasionally.

8.5/10


Overall, very nice.

holy shitballs, mcmaybe commented Sweetness. Thanks a lot Ill try to fix the flow issues, glad you read it and liked it

@Steve, thanks you re checked it. Ill fix the flow issues cause it IS going to be recorded for my EP eventually, but itll be the revised version. Glad you enjoyed the second verse.

@Nizar, glad you checked it as well.