THE RETURN

[Requiem]

not bad man, the flow kinda changed up halfway through it, and structure wise coulda been a little better, but u had some really nice lines.
the "Hussein..... Usain" line was some classic wordplay

[Arabian Shady]

not bad man, the flow kinda changed up halfway through it, and structure wise coulda been a little better, but u had some really nice lines.
the "Hussein..... Usain" line was some classic wordplay

Yea , i'ma get to workin on ma structure settings cause that what every 1 been advising me on, i think the structure kinda fuked the flow up,Glad you like wordplays!.. rest assured my comin verses shud be a step up!
much respect for chekin out me verse!

Mystical, mysterious, i'm back from my sebatical
A radical ,the free spirit, the first to rep the arab world

these first two lines were brilliant. "a radical, the free spirit." lol, classic wordplay.

i also love the flow of (i'm sure it's unintentional) "i'm back from my sabbatical." it rolls right off the tongue, probably because of the "back" "bat" sounds.

& i'm not sure if some of you realize, Arabian's got the internal rhymes going. it took me a while, but "mystical" rhymes with "radical" (also follows on from sabbatical) & "mysterious" sort of rhymes with "free spirit." i'm not sure if that was intentional. as for the rest of the verse, it sort of slipped off towards the end, but it had a great opener. keep the opener & use it in a later freestyle. no shame in recycling, if you're recycling good stuff.

Haha, Actually most of the things you mentioned were intentional , i had actually written the all the words seperately on my writing pad and i like tried to do it like:
-cal...-rious...-cal
-cal...irit...orld

or

Mystical, mysterious, i'm back from my sebatical
A radical ,the free spirit, the first to rep the arab world

like that how i wantedcit to be, i wanted to keep them alternatively and make the 2 bars flow like that,and they turned out good so i thought of using them as my opener but i kinda grew tired tryin ti make the whole verse sound like that so i like switched it up a bit and consequently messed the structure up,lol
Much respect for takin the time out to analyse my verse brother !!!