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Fa-Q - My Letter To God

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Re: Fa-Q - My Letter To God

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 14th, '10, 00:55

Lol yea...thanks I hate writing choruses...
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Re: Fa-Q - My Letter To God

Postby mcZu » Jan 14th, '10, 00:57

I feel ya on that one. It's harder than most people make it ought to be.
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Re: Fa-Q - My Letter To God

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 14th, '10, 05:21

yea...the problem with me is I try too hard to use multis in my hooks...and usually they would be better without them you know
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Re: Fa-Q - My Letter To God

Postby Edge » Jan 14th, '10, 09:09

first verse i liked but didnt stand out
the chorus, to be honest, i didnt really like because i also felt the last line didnt belong
2nd verse i liked a lot
3rd verse was bangin

this song got stronger as it progressed... i liked the whole deepness of it... the fact that i read a whole song with my short attention span is saying something lol props man on this hot drop
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Re: Fa-Q - My Letter To God

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 14th, '10, 09:27

Wooow thanks Edge...lol yea I'm definately revisiting the chorus...I sound so fuckin conceited on that last bar...sounds like something Jay-Z would say lol
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Re: Fa-Q - My Letter To God

Postby Edge » Jan 14th, '10, 09:44

Fa-Q wrote:Wooow thanks Edge...lol yea I'm definately revisiting the chorus...I sound so fuckin conceited on that last bar...sounds like something Jay-Z would say lol


kanye west* lol
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Re: Fa-Q - My Letter To God

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 14th, '10, 14:27

Lol Edge
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