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Postby Erick » Apr 20th, '06, 23:14

I just had an epifanny!(?) A 'dirty' roughed version...And of course a 'clean' one...Ain't I brilliant?! It was emotional...
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Apr 20th, '06, 23:22

carmelita this may sound dumb to some
but when you look at me i become numb and unglum
don't even look at my penis..i'm gonna cu...cum!!
as much as i love you CAR-ME-LETA
i prefer to beat of because my PALM IS BETTER
that purple gay font is hard to read
carmeleta come here give my dick a squeeze
when i look at you i know who the queen is
its not me or you its my penis
Carmelita, you're the heat ta my world, my support, my walls
i love it when you use your feet to contort my balls
whenever we together you make me warm like piss in swimming pools
i love the way you, suck play and fuck my family jewles
it's cool but be careful, it's fragile like a dry leaf
so whatever you do, just don't use you're teeth
and now im guna fuck you like im the farmer and your the sheep


carmelita when you're wet i want to just undress and caress ya
molest ya and than bust unda pressure and press your nipples against my toungue
and is it your pussy i'm fingering? cause my finger smells like dung!
i'm hung well as you can see andi want to be in you but first, you'll have to put yourself into me


my balls are spectacular, carmeleta sucking like dracula
on your head you got a spactular, i am the horny bactular
i'm attacking her but her head's immaculate but i still choose to smack her with my cack, my dick
and she's clappin with her tits even though they're miscitto bites
carmeletas a go getta nobody can ho better once was a lesbian wit antonietta/
she makes my bone better when its throbbing in pain, the temprutures gone but the blisters still remain/
they all look the same but some are oozing and green in complection
and since we're both virgins, there's no sence in using protection
weve never struggled for money cos your queen of prostitution
you unbucle and then suck the dick catch it in the air when they shooting
i'm rooting in the background while in the back of the line
waiting for my turn for her to make my knob shine
i hear your suffering from a case of pussy pollotion
but dont worry baby cos i have a curing sulotioun
it'll cause prufusion but it'll be worth the mist
you have to assist so spread your legs wide...here comes my fist


carmelita when you're wet i want to just undress and caress ya
molest ya and than bust unda pressure and press your nipples against my toungue
and is it your pussy i'm fingering? cause my finger smells like dung!
i'm hung well as you can see andi want to be in you but first, you'll have to put yourself into me


the first time we made love it was all around your bed room
we did it on your bunk bed and didnt have no headroom
you said boom cause it hurt when i went in you the first time
but you were so tight that it also hurt mine but now when i see you, my dick climbs
and its not because the pain im scared il suffer on a late night
its that when we finished you rolled over and i found u was a hamaphidite
that ain't right but it didnt bother me none, shit i got more errect
i'm bi so i want pussy and dick now i just gotta select
and we always fuck around i love making them porno tapes
im probly more gay though cos im atracted to you hairy grapes
and like hairy apes,eat my banana, we're savage
and don't tell me no, cause i ate your pussy when it smelled like cabage
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I still rap better than you.

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Ahum...

Postby Erick » Apr 20th, '06, 23:25

MuNxMuN wrote:if you ask me i don't think it's corny or sappy at all :sweating: i think it's just straight to the point :giggle:

Carmelita is far too sophisticated to apreciate language like this!

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?!

Postby Erick » Apr 20th, '06, 23:30

g_killa wrote:does your girl like dirty....

That's rather personal...But yes.

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Postby ThomasAguanis » Apr 20th, '06, 23:32

carmelita this may sound dumb to some
but when you look at me i become numb and unglum
don't even look at my penis..i'm gonna cu...cum!!
as much as i love you CAR-ME-LETA
i prefer to beat of because my PALM IS BETTER
that purple gay font is hard to read
carmeleta come here give my dick a squeeze
when i look at you i know who the queen is
its not me or you its my penis
Carmelita, you're the heat ta my world, my support, my walls
i love it when you use your feet to contort my balls
whenever we together you make me warm like piss in swimming pools
i love the way you, suck play and fuck my family jewles
it's cool but be careful, it's fragile like a dry leaf
so whatever you do, just don't use you're teeth
and now im guna fuck you like im the farmer and your the sheep


carmelita when you're wet i want to just undress and caress ya
molest ya and than bust unda pressure and press your nipples against my toungue
and is it your pussy i'm fingering? cause my finger smells like dung!
i'm hung well as you can see andi want to be in you but first, you'll have to put yourself into me


my balls are spectacular, carmeleta sucking like dracula
on your head you got a spactular, i am the horny bactular
i'm attacking her but her head's immaculate but i still choose to smack her with my cack, my dick
and she's clappin with her tits even though they're miscitto bites
carmeletas a go getta nobody can ho better once was a lesbian wit antonietta/
she makes my bone better when its throbbing in pain, the temprutures gone but the blisters still remain/
they all look the same but some are oozing and green in complection
and since we're both virgins, there's no sence in using protection
weve never struggled for money cos your queen of prostitution
you unbucle and then suck the dick catch it in the air when they shooting
i'm rooting in the background while in the back of the line
waiting for my turn for her to make my knob shine
i hear your suffering from a case of pussy pollotion
but dont worry baby cos i have a curing sulotioun
it'll cause prufusion but it'll be worth the mist
you have to assist so spread your legs wide...here comes my fist


carmelita when you're wet i want to just undress and caress ya
molest ya and than bust unda pressure and press your nipples against my toungue
and is it your pussy i'm fingering? cause my finger smells like dung!
i'm hung well as you can see andi want to be in you but first, you'll have to put yourself into me


the first time we made love it was all around your bed room
we did it on your bunk bed and didnt have no headroom
you said boom cause it hurt when i went in you the first time
but you were so tight that it also hurt mine but now when i see you, my dick climbs
and its not because the pain im scared il suffer on a late night
its that when we finished you rolled over and i found u was a hamaphidite
that ain't right but it didnt bother me none, shit i got more errect
i'm bi so i want pussy and dick now i just gotta select
and we always fuck around i love making them porno tapes
im probly more gay though cos im atracted to you hairy grapes
and like hairy apes,eat my banana, we're savage
and don't tell me no, cause i ate your pussy when it smelled like cabage
but i cant belive after all this love it ended tragic
i fucked you so hard from the top i impailed you on the matress
that just broke my heart in pieces, i feel pain of all sorts
i have to report that i'll miss having sex with you but ...i have no problem fucking a corpse :shifty:
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Apr 20th, '06, 23:38

g_killa wrote: woooooooooooooo lmao we rock 1 day even if its just outta extreme bordom this will get audiod lol


haha :laughing:
a audio of this would be..intresting
yeah we should def. audio this one day for fun.
it'd be funny as hell
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Copyrights!

Postby Erick » Apr 21st, '06, 01:54

g_killa wrote:LOL only prob may be findin a beat but we def gota do it sometime
This I like to hear! I have convinced the management and they're oke with it. And might I recommend you let yourselfs be inspired by Wu Tang-Clan and Eminem (in combo with Obie) beats...
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Postby Erick » Apr 21st, '06, 01:55

ThomasAguanis wrote:
g_killa wrote: woooooooooooooo lmao we rock 1 day even if its just outta extreme bordom this will get audiod lol


haha :laughing:
a audio of this would be..intresting
yeah we should def. audio this one day for fun.
it'd be funny as hell

Please do!

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Busy, busy...Busy!

Postby Erick » May 16th, '06, 14:40

I am being busy, but so busy...It ain't even funny anymore! The lovesong is still in the making....Please be patient, like always....
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Postby Infliction » May 16th, '06, 16:47

g_killa wrote:
does your girl like dirty....



Dude! he from amsterdam of course she like it dirty! :p
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Hey!

Postby Erick » May 16th, '06, 16:57

Amsterdam is quite descent compared to other cities worldwide, all we do is blowin' in the wind.... :smoking:
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Re: Hey!

Postby Tomega » May 16th, '06, 17:57

Erick wrote:Amsterdam is quite descent compared to other cities worldwide, all we do is blowin' in the wind.... :smoking:


yup yup
i know....
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