where to begin...

[Ka0t1c]

life is a blessin
so not why try to find out how high i can fly my message?
cuz there's no time to mess up
and miss my quest for which i am destined
i gotta remind myself and the rest i'm best when
my head rids of this benign depression
and i don't mind my lessons
cuz i see signs so i'm not guessin
i know my mission's to progress
to begin my resurrection
and i won't hide behind a mask
you can threaten
me if you like but i'm an assassin
but you better not ask
cuz you'll meet your deadead real fast
so don't ever try to cast
your shadows where i travel at
i swear that hero, you'll cause an avalanche

http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=103928&p=1437616#p1437616

[Enimee]

seemd kinda choppy, it didnt flow great prolly cause the structure was everywhere, buut u had some good imagery and vocab, i just think u coulda tied it all together better to pack the piece a lil more structurally sound i see what you were tryin to do though
overall decent drop, could be better though

[Ka0t1c]

ok, thanx for the feed, i appreciate that