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Runnin Outta Time (1st Verse)

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Runnin Outta Time (1st Verse)

Postby Atone » Dec 14th, '10, 09:08

Feel free to add a verse if you want

(Hook)
I keep chasin the dream but where am i goin
why am i movin without even knowin
i try so hard but i feel like it aint showin
i feel like my heart is slowin---and i'm losin my mind
tic toc- tic toc- i'm runnin outta time

(Verse)
On a good day i can write a couple hot bars
layin in bed at night dreamin i was a hot star
climbin up the rungs but even the very best never got far
and i aint tryin to gain radio attention or to be mentioned where the spots are
i'm just me- bein me- wish you could see in me what i see when i look in the reflection
spittin in directions for you to intercept what i'm flexin-
even when i'm messin i'm stressin tryin to give the best and fight this depression
whats left in this breath am i just livin for death or do i have a message?
i'm preachin these words reachin for birds- wanna touch the skies
leap in reverse when i aim forward toward more words and i close my eyes
what you heard? aint what i say i pray one day i can get it across
i aint about a boss- don't floss, no bling don't sing i just bring truth
when i step to the booth just to let loose but i feel it's no use
but i refuse to let go- i set flows to blow ya mind
you spoke your opinion now let me show ya mine
don't give a fuck what you think of me, i come for my shine
call me hughes- real name- no gimmicks i spit it how i live it cuz i come for my time

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Re: Runnin Outta Time (1st Verse)

Postby Enimee » Dec 14th, '10, 16:02

i liked this, simple and sweet and carried a good message, i like how u tied the verse in with the hook too, real good

great job man
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Re: Runnin Outta Time (1st Verse)

Postby Mr. Chambers » Dec 15th, '10, 02:57

link of feedback?
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so much WIN!
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Re: Runnin Outta Time (1st Verse)

Postby Atone » Dec 15th, '10, 05:48

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