by Edge » Jan 6th, '11, 08:47
Lello18 wrote:CoSh wrote:Some good lines. Flow was off and on. The Rhyming should be more complex. I can definitely tell Relapse influenced this lol. good frop overall though

thanks for the feed. agree bout the rhyming thing, my problem is i'm not getting better, but trying.
it wasnnt bad just a little basic... if you wannacome with more complex rhymes add some
internal rhyme and
multis to help the flow..
and also work on the structure. its easier to read/flow when the bars are structured nice...
when i show
rage, i grab a
page from the
rhyme booki leave you
shaking, nerves
breaking, ya
lines shookthats basic but you can make more and more syllables rhyme at the end of the bar or in the middle... blow good weed/ grow hood seeds and etc.
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em