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Heist

Postby classthe_king » Jan 5th, '11, 21:33

Went for a fast flow on this. Didn't focus on lyrics. This isn't really a good text verse but it's goona sound sweet recorded (hopefully)

The gods of rap on the tracks, who you know as hot as that
A lot of cats try n copy that but you not; ya wack
I got to cock it back for this vocal boxin match
And you ain’t no chiropractor so I don’t want no talkin back
I mock ya rap then go bring em where the blades meet
Cause I got to laugh at foes thinkin they can take me
I’m singin em this hate speech, and I fear it
They say I’m the sickest with the pen but I don’t even write lyrics
I hide spirits of every dead rapper in my record
As they cry and moan, listen and you might hear it
Man, why you think I sprung on my enemies?
I’m just tryin to get dough like unknown identity
It’s the Pyromaniacs and Rhyma Lions spittin the kinda violence
You would get from this sick and malign alliance
We’re bringin a new hour for the sound and the speech
Then laugh as you cower on the ground underneath
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Heist

Postby WakeUpShow » Jan 5th, '11, 21:37

The flow was really good. Could you explain the chiropractor line, i get the back part, but does it go any deeper that that? and could you please leave some feedback for my "The Stranger" piece? it would be greatly appreciated.
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Re: Heist

Postby classthe_king » Jan 6th, '11, 20:43

There's nothing more to it, I just used it cause it went with my rhyme scheme, it's a filler punch.

And yeah I got you
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Re: Heist

Postby watevermannnn » Jan 7th, '11, 06:51

My favorite part is
"They say I’m the sickest with the pen but I don’t even write lyrics
I hide spirits of every dead rapper in my record
As they cry and moan, listen and you might hear it"

If you got dope adlibs or an effect that could make that shit epic.

ILL. :y:
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Re: Heist

Postby MikeNUFC » Jan 7th, '11, 11:43

I got the flow instantly - really, really impressive - can't wait to hear this recorded.

I know you weren't focusing on rhyming but it was still solid. I felt the first two lines were slightly cliche - but that doesn't really matter considering how original the rest is.
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Re: Heist

Postby Enimee » Jan 8th, '11, 19:45

mutha fuckin god dammn son, this shit was dope as fuck mad lyrical with an intense flow i mean it was all around perfect not one line that i didnt lol at shit was good as fuck cant wait for the audio to drop
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Re: Heist

Postby BILI » Jan 11th, '11, 23:57

I think its dope man...I have one question tho,are you realising an album/ep/mixtape anytime soong?
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Re: Heist

Postby classthe_king » Jan 12th, '11, 00:01

Haha nah
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Re: Heist

Postby BILI » Jan 12th, '11, 00:05

classthe_king wrote:Haha nah

:n:

I think you should release at least something this year.EP maybe?I think you can make it,but you need to start it while you`re young,dont wait to much. :y:
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Re: Heist

Postby classthe_king » Jan 12th, '11, 00:07

BILI wrote:
classthe_king wrote:Haha nah

:n:

I think you should release at least something this year.EP maybe?I think you can make it,but you need to start it while you`re young,dont wait to much. :y:


I'll probably throw all my collabs into a mixtape.

I've got an album planned but I'm waiting till I get good quality and breath control before I record it. It's going to be a classic.
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Re: Heist

Postby BILI » Jan 12th, '11, 00:10

classthe_king wrote:
BILI wrote:
classthe_king wrote:Haha nah

:n:

I think you should release at least something this year.EP maybe?I think you can make it,but you need to start it while you`re young,dont wait to much. :y:


I'll probably throw all my collabs into a mixtape.

I've got an album planned but I'm waiting till I get good quality and breath control before I record it. It's going to be a classic.

Cant wait...you have crazy dope delivery,so with better quality it has to be classic :y:
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