Everybody Knows

[titan23]

Alright, well this flows nicely with the beat I got behind it.

I'm jumpin on this track
with my boy Ryan
turned the fuck around
caught the boy cryin
asked him what was wrong
he said that it's my rhymin
i said shut the fuck up
and quit your fuckin whinin

im on this damn song
for a fuckin reason
i dont know it yet
but im in it for the season
example number one
de-sean jackson
i run the damn 40
in 4-2-9 seconds
tell me that aint fast
and you'll hit the ground guessin
what the hell just happened
to ya dang head, bless it
cause if ya hit again
for the damn second
you'll no longer be mentioned
on this mothafuckin record

now i tore that shit up
no need for recognition
im like the putting the key
in the fuckin ignition
i start you the fuck up
and watch your head glisten
as you get pissed
now aint that reminiscent
of the the time i shot ya dick
with a AK 47
and then ya started screamin
but aint nobody heard it
shot ya ass again
and then my attention got diverted
to someone more important
and ya ass got deserted
cause...

(chorus)
everybody knows my name
everybody knows you're to blame
everybody knows I proclaim
the motherfuckin throne
in this god damn game

...and then my friend is gonna have his verse
whatta ya guys think?

[titan23]

Thanks, i'm writing more so i'll take what you said and try to use it. How do you think I could make my rhymes less boring?

And, the shooting part kinda just feels like it belongs in the beat ya know? I don't know, sometimes if you hear an instrumental, you get a feeling as to what should be said on the track.

Thanks though, I appreciate it

[titan23]

Yeah I know what you mean, just being more creative with my words/rhymes.
I'll try to incorporate that in my next one. Keep checking back on this forum, I'll be making a new more complex rhyme.
Probably a couple days.
Thanks for all the advice, I appreciate it.