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Re: lol.

Postby Emadyville » Mar 6th, '11, 06:56

Overall it was good, flowed well too :y:

This was my favorite part, simple but fuckin true:

Keep writing your raps, always hoping for feed
Rapping over your beats that won't get released
Keep boasting on your songs and posting your Tweets
Keep posting all your blogs that nobody reads


:worship:
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


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Re: lol.

Postby Yah-hah » Mar 7th, '11, 06:00

Hahah dope man like the feel of it. Last line is funny too. The flow overall was very spot on too. Glad to see more of your writtens you've always had a good way with words. Yo you think you can feed my two latest?
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: lol.

Postby ArsheyHaq » Mar 8th, '11, 08:03

AHAHA I must have read that about 40 times, and it's still funny to me! The thing that makes this all the more impressive is that it doesn't even seem like you tried, yet it's still good lol
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