Shallow Free Verse

[_Steven_]

Dear members of the opposite sex who, I talk or I text to
Lemme get it off of my chest, you aren't that special
I don't respect you, and ever since I met you
I've been thinkin sex....and you're just someone to get next to
I mean it, it'd be different if I didn't have a penis
But I do, so you should come over here and see it
Don't be squeamish, and did I tell you that I love you?
Did I tell you that you're pretty? Did I say that I can trust you?
Then we must screw......I played it by the book
Why you givin me that look? I take it that we shook
When I sent you all the smilies, sent you all the texts
Does a relationship status not entitle me to sex?
What can I get? Let me steal a couple bases
I'll tell my friends you sent me pictures of you naked
I'll probably tell them that you're boring and you're stupid
Cause you are are to me, and everyone, you're useless

[macdaddy019967]

lol, pretty funny stuff
is this about Aira lmao
don't deny it niigga
i liked it

[Xray]

The flow was there, but you didn't have much rhyming to tell you the truth. It was basic rhyming for the most part. Even when you did have some multis, it was extremely basic. Nothing original in this, it's that same tired concept done over and over again. Up the creativity level bro.

[_Steven_]

Thanks for peeping it guys. I wrote it in like 15 minutes before I went to bed, that's why it's kind of bland.

[Xray]

My advice is, take all and every critic you get, it will only make you better. And don't get mad at bad feedback, try to keep an open mind when you are reading feedback bro, seriously.