Edge feat. Innovation

[Innovation]

Just random verses, not aimed at anyone. Just rhymes.

I'm starting to come out of a long writer's block.. hence why I couldn't write as much as Edge. Not a fantastic verse by any means, looking for some good feed for both of our verses!

Feed: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=111068

(Innovation)
Edge and Innovation, you can hate us but please,
Individually, you know we beat haters with ease,
Explosive rhymes packed with ferocious nines,
Makes it easy to destory your corrosive lines,
Quit saying "this game; I suppose it's mine",
That sort of shit I loathe it mayne!
All those haters? You provoked it damn,
Lose of status? You evoked it man!

(Edge)
My pickup line innovation
At the bar leaves women hatin
So i throw em in the car and i get into rapein'
Edge? Nah u cant escape him
So what the fuck u tryin for
Ur gunna be cryin more, u lyin whore
What the fuck u dyin for? Self respect?
Dont reach for my gun, it wont help protect
U against the e.d.g.e.
Brought innovation to see me
Up on the track, go against us, and its up with the mack
Next thing u know its click, boom boom, bullets suck in ya back
no luck with that, now u get the i.v.
I crash like an ocean wave so dont cry me
A river. Wer drunk off the liquor
Smoked a blunt too, to fuck us up quicker
Whose brains sicker? Slicker? Dont make me pull the trigger
i scratch ya face, sniff coke and than i stick her
Right with the knife in the windpipe, blade stuck like a sticker
Bitch called the cops, i dipped off, go figgue

[Ka0t1c]

That's pretty good edge!

[ArsheyHaq]

Innovation, your multies were pretty impressive, but I wish I had more of a verse to judge BUT from what I saw, you're good. The rhymes seem a little forced, but it could be because you're coming out of your writer's block, like you said. Anyway, hope you get out of your block soon, so I can read more from you.

Fav. lines from you:
"Explosive rhymes packed with ferocious nines,
Makes it easy to destory your corrosive lines,
Quit saying "this game; I suppose it's mine",
That sort of shit I loathe it mayne!"

Edge, you make it seem like rhyming comes easy to you the transitions from one line to the other were real slick and clean pretty dope verse by you, but my only complaint is that you seem to rhyme simple words. You've got skill, and you should step up your game by showing us what else you can do...maybe longer multies or displaying a larger vocab? How long have you been rapping/how old are you?

Fav. lines from you:
"So what the fuck u tryin for
Ur gunna be cryin more, u lyin whore
What the fuck u dyin for? Self respect?"

and

"Right with the knife in the windpipe, blade stuck like a sticker
Bitch called the cops, i dipped off, go figgue"
haha liked how you ended that

[Innovation]

Innovation, your multies were pretty impressive, but I wish I had more of a verse to judge BUT from what I saw, you're good. The rhymes seem a little forced, but it could be because you're coming out of your writer's block, like you said. Anyway, hope you get out of your block soon, so I can read more from you.

Fav. lines from you:
"Explosive rhymes packed with ferocious nines,
Makes it easy to destory your corrosive lines,
Quit saying "this game; I suppose it's mine",
That sort of shit I loathe it mayne!"

Edge, you make it seem like rhyming comes easy to you the transitions from one line to the other were real slick and clean pretty dope verse by you, but my only complaint is that you seem to rhyme simple words. You've got skill, and you should step up your game by showing us what else you can do...maybe longer multies or displaying a larger vocab? How long have you been rapping/how old are you?

Fav. lines from you:
"So what the fuck u tryin for
Ur gunna be cryin more, u lyin whore
What the fuck u dyin for? Self respect?"

and

"Right with the knife in the windpipe, blade stuck like a sticker
Bitch called the cops, i dipped off, go figgue"
haha liked how you ended that

Thank you very much! Feed is much appreciated.

[Edge]

Thanks guys, I really appreciate the feed. I'll step my vocab up on the next one.
And iv been writing for like 2 years I guess, but only more seriously for like a year. I'm trying to record a cd but only have my shittty laptops webcam mic to record it lol and I just turned 20

[Immortal Equinox]

Just random verses, not aimed at anyone. Just rhymes.

I'm starting to come out of a long writer's block.. hence why I couldn't write as much as Edge. Not a fantastic verse by any means, looking for some good feed for both of our verses!

Feed: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=111068

(Innovation)
Edge and Innovation, you can hate us but please,
Individually, you know we beat haters with ease,
Explosive rhymes packed with ferocious nines,
Makes it easy to destory your corrosive lines,
Quit saying "this game; I suppose it's mine",
That sort of shit I loathe it mayne!
All those haters? You provoked it damn,
Lose of status? You evoked it man!

Class B multies, pretty simplistic but effective. Flow was alright, could have been better, could have been worse. Your ability to write seamlessly is something that I liked, however your ability to use that power is lacking. Let it move through your mind on to the paper and don't let your hand be an obstacle.

(Edge)
My pickup line innovation
At the bar leaves women hatin
So i throw em in the car and i get into rapein'
Edge? Nah u cant escape him
So what the fuck u tryin for
Ur gunna be cryin more, u lyin whore
What the fuck u dyin for? Self respect?
Dont reach for my gun, it wont help protect
U against the e.d.g.e.
Brought innovation to see me
Up on the track, go against us, and its up with the mack
Next thing u know its click, boom boom, bullets suck in ya back
no luck with that, now u get the i.v.
I crash like an ocean wave so dont cry me
A river. Wer drunk off the liquor
Smoked a blunt too, to fuck us up quicker
Whose brains sicker? Slicker? Dont make me pull the trigger
i scratch ya face, sniff coke and than i stick her
Right with the knife in the windpipe, blade stuck like a sticker
Bitch called the cops, i dipped off, go figgue

The flow on this was horrible. I didn't get any type of flow whatsoever. Could it be a 3/8 flow? a 4/4? Or a 6/8? I don't understand what you were trying to get out of this piece, but maybe if you record it I can get a better idea of what you were trying to portray. The lyrics alone are not impressive, however they get the job done and they are pretty good. Multies are very simplistic but they intertwine with the rest of the verse so that was a good thing. Structure wasn't all that great but neither is mine when I write. Every gap between each line should be where you breathe. If not that, it should be a pause.

Good work.

[Innovation]

Innovation did some high-class multi's , gotta say , it was a short verse but damn
the first bar was very much a-like , the whole bar rhymed together not only the ending , nice
it flows great, i was rapping when i first read it , it was great , you should post here more often

the ending of Edge's verse was epic , the whole verse was , it rhymed perfect , it flowed perfect
but you should try some better multi's next time with more syllables , what you did was dope , but i think it can be done even better , thats my only note

dope shit!

Cheers bro! Feed means a lot, I'll be posting more often.

[Edge]

innovation, i really liked ur multis and it flowed nicely... it was def short, and the only way to beat writers block is keep writin man. so hit me up if u wanna colab again... also im jw where r u from?

[Innovation]

innovation, i really liked ur multis and it flowed nicely... it was def short, and the only way to beat writers block is keep writin man. so hit me up if u wanna colab again... also im jw where r u from?

Will do bro, cheers for the kind works. I'm from the UK.

[Edge]

innovation, i really liked ur multis and it flowed nicely... it was def short, and the only way to beat writers block is keep writin man. so hit me up if u wanna colab again... also im jw where r u from?

Will do bro, cheers for the kind works. I'm from the UK.

That's what I thought lol when I rapped ur verse to myself I did it in an american accent first than again in the british accent and it worked better