depression ....(just 12 bars off the top of my dome)

by **polluted** » May 2nd, '06, 06:31

How come life can be a stream of endless troubles?
all u hoped for - gone, dreams blew up like bubbles
u feel like under the rubbles of a collapsed edifice
cannot move ur limbs, please grant me moral benefice
life shalt unfold into a involved complicated thesis
u try to walk it but u confined to wheelchair n u wear prothsesis
then u wanna utter G..(od) but u stumble
"paraplegic" religion crumble, "no GOD" u mumble
Do for yourself, count on "I", plea no support
Fuck God, its the lot of the dead to try to establish "spiritual rapport"
Hold ur fort n cast a retort in every competetive sport
Till u fade, remember life's perilous like a run on a blade

by **polluted** » May 2nd, '06, 06:40

memyselforwho wrote:nice ncie, i like the word play, your improving your style, keep at it

tanx dog...appreciate ur positive feedback (eventually) :whistle:

btw, 2+2 gets us at 5, ryt?

by **polluted** » May 2nd, '06, 10:17

Sarah wrote:That was good, I like it. Good work

tanks, babe

by **> Evil _ MoNkEy <** » May 2nd, '06, 10:33

nice.... i liked it.... i just got one question...... how come no one rips on u for sad shit? :zipped:

newayz... thats besides the point.... i thought it was very good, clever wording and lavish vocabulary use...... very well written

by **polluted** » May 2nd, '06, 10:37

> Evil _ MoNkEy < wrote:nice.... i liked it.... i just got one question...... how come no one rips on u for sad shit?

newayz... thats besides the point.... i thought it was very good, clever wording and lavish vocabulary use...... very well written

props for positive things on my lil piece...

i dont no y they dont rip on me...
prolly u were a lil sadder than I

by **> Evil _ MoNkEy <** » May 2nd, '06, 10:42

polluted wrote:
> Evil _ MoNkEy < wrote:nice.... i liked it.... i just got one question...... how come no one rips on u for sad shit?

newayz... thats besides the point.... i thought it was very good, clever wording and lavish vocabulary use...... very well written

props for positive things on my lil piece...

i dont no y they dont rip on me...
prolly u were a lil sadder than I

lol.... that could be it..... i dont know... or maybe they just got sick of me whining so much

newayz....... ya... i really enjoyed reading it.... keep it up. it may be a small peice, but it portrays big skills

by **polluted** » May 2nd, '06, 11:01

> Evil _ MoNkEy < wrote:
polluted wrote:
> Evil _ MoNkEy < wrote:nice.... i liked it.... i just got one question...... how come no one rips on u for sad shit?

newayz... thats besides the point.... i thought it was very good, clever wording and lavish vocabulary use...... very well written

props for positive things on my lil piece...

i dont no y they dont rip on me...
prolly u were a lil sadder than I

lol.... that could be it..... i dont know... or maybe they just got sick of me whining so much

newayz....... ya... i really enjoyed reading it.... keep it up. it may be a small peice, but it portrays big skills

props man
hard to write in ya second l-ge

by **Mc Cubz** » May 10th, '06, 22:18

polluted wrote:How come life can be a stream of endless troubles?
all u hoped for - gone, dreams blew up like bubbles
u feel like under the rubbles of a collapsed edifice
cannot move ur limbs, please grant me moral benefice
life shalt unfold into a involved complicated thesis
u try to walk it but u confined to wheelchair n u wear prothsesis
then u wanna utter G..(od) but u stumble
"paraplegic" religion crumble, "no GOD" u mumble
Do for yourself, count on "I", plea no support
Fuck God, its the lot of the dead to try to establish "spiritual rapport"
Hold ur fort n cast a retort in every competetive sport
Till u fade, remember life's perilous like a run on a blade

respect.......nice rhymin

by **polluted** » May 11th, '06, 03:48

propz Cubz

by **ThomasAguanis** » May 11th, '06, 04:01

nice one
i liked it a lot

by **polluted** » May 11th, '06, 06:19

tanks TA.

by **$0 R3@L** » May 11th, '06, 15:55

who the hells x play clan and why is it under polluted and maybe's name :confusion:

,lemme know...

by **polluted** » May 12th, '06, 04:39

$0 R3@L wrote:who the hells x play clan and why is it under polluted and maybe's name ,lemme know...

it's mighty establishment...
accost MC Maybe for further comments.

depression ....(just 12 bars off the top of my dome)

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