1st 2 verses of song I'm working on now(Dream Of Death)

by **ThomasAguanis** » May 10th, '06, 02:11

ok well i wasnt gonna post this untill i recorded it and wrote it all but i'm liking it and think its different than anything i wrote before so i wanted to see what people think so far...
oh and before you start reading..the lyrics arn't finished yet so they could change to flow better/make more sence...

Dream Of Death
I stay home, dream, see a vision that's insane/
a grave stone with a clean incision of my name/
gray bones must mean provisions of my pain/
wake up with these visions in scripted in my brain/
everyday it

by **ThomasAguanis** » May 10th, '06, 02:24

memyselforwho wrote:real real deep and nice, genius work of art bro, fuckin bravo

thanks man
really appreaciated :worship:

by **ThomasAguanis** » May 10th, '06, 02:53

memyselforwho wrote:i have nothing to say bro, pure damn genius, you really suprised me, i sware i have no reason to suck up to you right?, but this is one of the best songs i ever seen, if you can rap this, what the fuck are you doin sittin infront of the computer

wow
thanks man. i didn't expect all that. and i can pretty much rap it i tried recording it after i posted it and i know if i practise it enough i'll get it the way i want it
but thanks again i seriously didn't expect feedback like that on this song

by **AspirinE** » May 10th, '06, 09:06

Woaa very nice man, im looking forward to hearing this one audio. :worship:

by **Inzanity** » May 10th, '06, 12:36

real dope shit man wicked deep I loved it those first four lines of the course

I stay home, dream, see a vision that's insane/
a grave stone with a clean incision of my name/
gray bones must mean provisions of my pain/
wake up with these visions in scripted in my brain/

fuckin' Genius

by **ThomasAguanis** » May 10th, '06, 20:54

woah
i didnt expct such great feedback
thanks everyone :worship:

i didn't start the 2nd verse yet because i stopped and wrote for another song...
but i have ideas still for it and will write it soon and record it too
(hmm maybe this will be my track on the TMW mixtape :-k

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and once again..thanks for all the feedback. really does encourage me to write more :worship:

by **$0 R3@L** » May 11th, '06, 15:54

awesome at last a written worth reading :worship:

by **mart85** » May 11th, '06, 16:17

yeah, very nice start...if the rest is just as good as that, it will be amazing :happy:

by **Curious** » May 11th, '06, 17:05

I usually don't give u guys feedback on ur verse - just want u to know that i do read them n really enjoy them but since i don't rap myself i don't really feel i'm qualified to judge - but Tom, this is really, really good, great vocabulary, great images n great flow in the words -very, very poetic, i'm so looking forward to reading the rest!

by **ThomasAguanis** » May 12th, '06, 21:47

thanks real, mart and Curious. i'm glad you guys liked it so much. i feel honored that Curious posted in this after her explanation :sweating:

and i'm writing the 2nd verse now and am about half done.
when i'm fiished with it i'll be sure to edit it into my first post and change the topic title and bump this if it needs it.

and i recorded this for practise and let some people listen to it and all the feedback i got so far was great so i'm really looking foward to finishing this and getting a audio up so you can all hear it but you may have to wait for the This Means War mixtape to hear it...

by **InZanE** » May 17th, '06, 19:00

great work man.

by **ThomasAguanis** » Jun 5th, '06, 22:11

2nd verse added(finally) :sweating:

by **stevethetruth** » Jun 6th, '06, 17:51

nice i'm loving the chourus

by **stevethetruth** » Jun 6th, '06, 17:57

nice i'm loving the chourus

by **stevethetruth** » Jun 6th, '06, 17:57

nice i'm loving the chourus

1st 2 verses of song I'm working on now(Dream Of Death)

1st 2 verses of song I'm working on now(Dream Of Death)

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