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Postby sinemm » May 18th, '06, 12:32

Dady where r u i jus need u
come and save me
Come and take me to the heaven too
Come on dady pls were r u
this time i realy need u
İ want u to come back and hold my hand through

Sick and tired of standing alone
i feel i dont even belong in my own home
conscience is killing me, feeling me cry,
i cant stand, i stare to the sky
looking for guidence, i just find violence,
i hurt myself, i just need your help
i feel torn, burnt, cursed and hated
i need love, your mind re-instated
i feel rejections, cold words cause so much pain
feels like infections, rip through ma brain
hate come my way, i hit back at it
people treat me like ive got a drug habit

sometimes i think i deserve all that
but when i think im stil your babe
starting to throw it from my head fuck and forget
i jus wanted to be happy but some1 doesnt want it to be like that
im jus like a child who lost her toy and dead
after u left i forgot how to say dad
it seems im not alone but i dont feel like that
i know u hear me and u see me when i make mistakes
but pls at least you forgive me for being stupid and
jus dont make me without your hugs and kisses when u back
i jus want them not to treat me like a fuckin mad
cuz im tired of tryin to explain myself

i jus try to swim in a deep pool
my eyes dont see my legs my arms dont move
im almost in the under i look so poor
all of them see me but dont hold my hand through
it seems so funny when some1 drawnin
they r laughin out loud and keep bein horny
that time i started to go hell my soul started to leave my body
my body started to swim on the water lonely
and suddenly ppl started to get worry
they never thought that but it happend finally
they got what they want and theres nothing anymore not to be happy...


well actually i thought 2 times to post that here cuz its not so good but i hpe u'd like it :)
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Postby kait » May 19th, '06, 00:22

It's pretty good. Kind of sad, and the vocabulary is a little simple. But overall pretty good. :)
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Postby sinemm » May 19th, '06, 08:49

well thanx for the comments first and then letnme say that english isnt my own language and so that it seems alil simple yeah but i jus tryin to improve the language and tryin to tell me feelings into english too anyway
thanx again
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Postby sinemm » May 19th, '06, 09:13

ive jus written that im not sure bout it but howst?

I still can't find what keeps me here.
But some1
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Postby Inzanity » May 19th, '06, 12:24

there both really good
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Postby sinemm » May 19th, '06, 20:22

ohh thats realyy good for me hearin that thanx alot :)
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Postby NEVER ENOUGH » May 20th, '06, 16:16

sad but good writing :happy:
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Postby sinemm » May 20th, '06, 19:20

um yea you're right i wrote them when i was in a bad mood :( while cryin :(
thanx
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