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by **sinemm** » May 26th, '06, 12:25

nobody understands cuz they never try
theres jus 1 person loves me but hes dead right now
i always miss some1 but never reach them
ive lots of problems but still try to look well
all the thing i have jus my soul
and jus tryin to decode of my soul
i started to know my own
and i got it right now im all alone!!!
There r lots of fuckin ppl around me
im prety sure they all hate me now

its a fuckin game and i lost it
So ima change the rules and that time ima win it
Thats my life thats my game and thats my rules
if i lose it again in spite of my own rules
i promise you man i

by **neha** » May 26th, '06, 13:11

I like it

by **Restlesswon** » May 26th, '06, 13:37

pretty good,but u used soul 2 times in the opening

u could have tryed

all the things i have is just my soul
without it within i can never feel whole

some shit like that,

by **sinemm** » May 26th, '06, 16:42

well thanx firstly both of u
and thanx for your idea but i did it

by **stevethetruth** » May 27th, '06, 02:14

not bad not bad
the only thing that throws me off is the repeation of the same word

but other than that not bad man

by **sinemm** » May 29th, '06, 14:11

well that means i must be more careful bout it but actually i dont care that so much cuz i wanna write what i feel but i wont forget the critics thanx

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