The Emperor's New Gear.

[namix]

Dedicated to the “skill-to-shit talk” ratio gettin all kinds of fucked up.

"The Emperor’s New Gear"

the emperor’s rockin new gear! but what he rocks is not clear.
and after some reflection, the queer should of gotten a mirror

wonderin who?

THIS DROP IS FOR YOU! come get handled like my business.
some put stock in you; but you couldn’t keep my interest.
wanna hold our attention?! ya too shitty dude, sorry…
at best we'll be dye vested like a hippy groom party.

is this a flex about his clothes? is it a diss about his art?
either way, it isn’t very hard to see me shittin on his garb.
i be spittin out them bars…boy, they fly just like my venom;
he could battle me in skinny jeans, i’d still be tighter denim.

fuck the black shoes, black socks, & black pants the cat got;
see him beat to the ground…
….and leave a REAL profound impression in the blacktop!
even as a vegetable, he’ll be pushed around like a cash crop;
until im charged with extended battery like a fucking laptop.
got some bad clocks, he's ticked but not movin; i detect weakness;
so i'll rip his fuckin throat apart and sell his girl some neckpieces!

then wear his heart on MY sleeve; people, see we had love!
nothing has ever came between us except really bad blood!
wheelin in mud, when he’s found flat; its exceeding bad luck;
….who said changing attire was easy after bein jacked up?
help arrived, but the tow-truck man just stopped to diss him
cuz he cant pull off the lugz.. or yoga pants he rocks wit’em

don’t get me started on his taste, no topic deader than that
if I liked the distressed look…….. I’d rock his head as a hat.
but first i’ll make him face his fears; wit one look in the glass
once he soils his pants, im going to plant my foot in his ass
style-wise, cant iron out the problems, wrinkled too vicious;
so i'll put his blouse thru the wringer with this bitch still in it!

his impact aint lastin long, kids act like his rap’s the bomb
but that formalwear off quick as a drunk chick after prom
I can pull quotables out my ass.... he got nothing this fancy
he'd have to pull his only one-liner out the front of his panties

caught his name 'n let it go; what’s my reason to be skeptical?
if memory serves, I’ll remind him that his pieces are forgettable
i might blog about his spectacles, use my site to cite the truth,
make my tightest Loophole ever, describin how I tied his noose!

he coulda used my tutelage; he really needed supervision;
but didn’t need the cross-training to receive this crucifixion!
i discovered a cover-up, revealed it; now the mystery’s dead;
find the legend buried deep within some conspiracy threads.

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feedback link to an eedee drop:
viewtopic.php?f=24&t=151291&p=2057916

[Just Silver]

liked the blacktop line but other wise i found the structure strange it sorta threw me off

i mean it flowed decently there was just somethin distracting
i liked multi useage seems like a piece that needs to be read over a few times

[Sam.]

Good ass drop. I like the rhyme scheme and how you kept it consistent throughout, I've never come across a drop with a rhyme scheme like that, so, kudos to you, mate. Flow was good, too.

There were two places where the end rhymes were not proper like this:

ot some bad clocks, he's ticked but not movin; i detect weakness;
so i'll rip his fuckin throat apart and sell his girl some neckpieces!

&

style-wise, cant iron out the problems, wrinkled too vicious;
so i'll put his blouse thru the wringer with this bitch still in it!

Work on it.

[namix]

good looks @sam... i hear you on the end-rhymes, of the two, i feel you more on the vicious/in it than i do on the tri-syllabic rhyme de-tect-weakness / neck-pieces.... but hey, everyone has their own phonetic annunciation i suppose. thanks for the feed bro.

liked the blacktop line but other wise i found the structure strange it sorta threw me off

i mean it flowed decently there was just somethin distracting
i liked multi useage seems like a piece that needs to be read over a few times

that's interesting feed - can you expound on how the structure was strange? this is standard 'short-bar text' - common in most leagues across the net since like '02 bro. literally, from rapmusic .com, bboys, netcees (before axed), rapworld, 411, mrblunts, prowlers, artofbattling, projectrhyme, rapisalive...

been a lot of places, is the structure that different here? kick me some more feedback hommie, always looking to write for a broader audience and interested in how structure preferences differ here.

good looks @Just Silver - appreciate the feed.

[Just Silver]

good looks @sam... i hear you on the end-rhymes, of the two, i feel you more on the vicious/in it than i do on the tri-syllabic rhyme de-tect-weakness / neck-pieces.... but hey, everyone has their own phonetic annunciation i suppose. thanks for the feed bro.

liked the blacktop line but other wise i found the structure strange it sorta threw me off

i mean it flowed decently there was just somethin distracting
i liked multi useage seems like a piece that needs to be read over a few times

that's interesting feed - can you expound on how the structure was strange? this is standard 'short-bar text' - common in most leagues across the net since like '02 bro. literally, from rapmusic .com, bboys, netcees (before axed), rapworld, 411, mrblunts, prowlers, artofbattling, projectrhyme, rapisalive...

been a lot of places, is the structure that different here? kick me some more feedback hommie, always looking to write for a broader audience and interested in how structure preferences differ here.

good looks @Just Silver - appreciate the feed.

the structure differs here in that theres no spaces within the paragraphs but either way that short bar stuff is professional lookin

[Just Silver]

Everyone forgets some words can be said differently or any word in general

[namix]

thanks fellas - i've only dropped here a few times, so still picking up on this site's culture/steeze a bit. appreciate the insights.

and thanks @Menzo & @Just Silver for the clarification too.

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[Ka0t1c]

good skills, nothing much to say but keep being impressive

[Sam.]

@ Menzo: What Man1x said in his 1st line of the reply to my post.

[namix]

@Ka0t1c - thanks a lot bro! 'preciate it.

@Sam. - were you referring to me as Man1x, or someone else?