keep praying for ma downfall!!!

[shady_soul]

ya'll talk about tupac, play his tracks n' ya say he's great,
yo, neva' forget, hate in some individual gave'im a fateful death.

its true i don't wear much smile on my face,
they ask me if i got into beef or i wana leave this place.
i aint got no beef wid' noone n' i dont wana' be a goner,
its jus me being myself,
i jus wonder and let my crazy thoughts reach each corner.
i aint gona' hate noone nomore, i solemnly swore,
if ever it sounds like it in ma lines, then its jus a metaphor.
i shall not separate a friend from my enemy,
i'm jus sorry but im' jus too mixed up wid' hate n' envy,
i ain't hating on u but neither can i be friendly.
enough wid' my stress, depression n' head-tension,
kinda' late but neway i've learnt my lesson.
if people hate people then the goodness within'em dies,
they've hated me so so much but n' they don know,
same hate is killing'em from the inside.
write on a paper, paint on the wall, keep praying for my downfall,
ya ain't gona' change nothing, i shall always walk tall.
betta' yet, i will smile back to you, write poems to you,
i will keep on explaining the truth to you.
man! we all live life n' living is hard and people can be so mean,
don't get too busy on hating meh, ya'll ruin your own dream.
it seems far but i ain't gona' give up, till we make a team,
hard to believe, even harder to trust but thats my scheme.
i don't care how u gona' take me!
coz' more u hate meh, more strong u make me.
i've shed too many tears , aint gona' cry no longer,
your anger, hate n' jelousy has fulfilled my hunger.
inspired by the greatest hip hop artists in the history,
but hey thats a whole different story.
i'm driven by a motivation and the right attitude,
thanks to all who hated meh , wid' ma deepest gratitude.

let peace rule yo!

[JMG]

well just remember practice makes perfect

[shady_soul]

yeah it sure does/ thanks

[James R.]

You sound like a beginner so taking that into consideration it wasn't that bad, but it wasn't really that good. You sound like you heard something you liked that was really deep and tried to imitate it ya know? I'm not talking about biting, just using the style. So try out some different rhyme schemes, work on your vocab, thats the biggest one, the bigger the vocab you have the better. Stay up

[shady_soul]

aigght/ thanx for the feedz anyway
peace