In skl and very bored

[sneekykiddo]

"I was a young boy that had big plans
Now Im just a shitty old man"
Im listenin to that song from them
Green Days the name and I dont kno why I am
Listenin to them when Im an Eminem fan
O right, I did mention I was bored and hell jacked
By that I mean Im half dead half sleepy and half man
Whoops my mistake I didnt mean to say that
Im not half man, Im human and very much female at that
One gender Im gonna just sit here and play my Fender
Tho the only thing I kno is strumming but I got a better use for later
Ima just Break it into two onto the teachers head for a headstart
Im a retard and as I said I was bored and Ima see ya...

[JMG]

um wtf u say ur a male and a female ...

[Tash8]

it's okay

but terrible structure and terrible flow..no multis and the rhyme weren't that great, and lastly it's way too simple.. I mean almost anyone in the world can do that... if you have the talent to rhyme then you gotta use it, if you don't have it then you gotta learn and work harder than others

no hate, but keep workin

[James R.]

Wow I can definitely tell you were bored with that one. Didnt really say much and it was kinda confusing to read so work on structure a bit, try to make sure your lines end in a rhyme with something. I wouldn't suggest skipping lines between rhymes, I think you might have, but I could very well be wrong. Anyways I can tell it was some shit for fun so I aint gonna get to into it, but I wanna see smtn you do thats a lil more serious. Then I'll give some deeper feed.

[sneekykiddo]

I did it in like less than a minute lol i did say I was hella bored in skl.. i wasnt gonna even bother about flo and structure

and btw.. I WAS KIDDING about the man part for fuks sake.. jesus..

[Tash8]

and one more thing

GREEN DAY, EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEWWWWWWWWWWWWW

but the eminem thing is aite so on

[$0 R3@L]

wtf written as a man but ya profile says you got a vagina,you a fruitcake?

and...

and one more thing

GREEN DAY, EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEWWWWWWWWWWWWW

but the eminem thing is aite so on

get out of marshalls anus,he wont thank you for being up there.

[Tash8]

wtf written as a man but ya profile says you got a vagina,you a fruitcake?

and...

and one more thing

GREEN DAY, EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEWWWWWWWWWWWWW

but the eminem thing is aite so on

get out of marshalls anus,he wont thank you for being up there.

what the fuck you talking about, I said green day sucks, but eminem doesn't.. how do you get way you said out of that?

man every time anyone mentions eminem yall start stomping on their backs.. ain't this a shady forum?

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

wtf written as a man but ya profile says you got a vagina,you a fruitcake?

and...

and one more thing

GREEN DAY, EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEWWWWWWWWWWWWW

but the eminem thing is aite so on

get out of marshalls anus,he wont thank you for being up there.

what the fuck you talking about, I said green day sucks, but eminem doesn't.. how do you get way you said out of that?

man every time anyone mentions eminem yall start stomping on their backs.. ain't this a shady forum?

no its a hip hop discussion forum

[Tash8]

^ it's a hip hop forum, but it's based on Shady/Aftermath it says that in the banner...

[$0 R3@L]

because mr tash everytime anyone sheds a little doubt on eminem you seem to be his superman in tights that runs in to tell us why we've gotten eminem all wrong.If you wanna just love eminem i suggest you visit a fansite made by girls with pink banners and marshall dick sucking smileys.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

^ it's a hip hop forum, but it's based on Shady/Aftermath it says that in the banner...

its a hip hop discussion board hosted on a shady/aftermarth fansite


this forum is not a "lick marshal mathers and shady records ass" forum, the banner mearly states the subject for the fan site, the forum is built by the members not the groupies

[Tash8]

^ exactly, so why is soo wrong to say anything good about eminem.. I merely said that green day sucks but eminem is aite..

tell me what's wrong about that? cause both green day and eminem were mentioned in the raps.

and so real, when did i make an excuse to defend the doubt on eminem? I never thought I did, when people saaid he sunk i agreed. when people said he could come back, i agreed.

[$0 R3@L]

ok ok
















































now lick it go on......

[Tash8]

^^ that was probably one of the gayest thing ever done.. but you made me laugh..