Slain

[Tash8]

I'm trying to tamper my anger like a volume sound control n
im uncontrollably screaming n my volumes not bound to hold
and i'm turning to a vicious vague monster crazed plague
raised egg enslaving slaves n without my intention to deflate
but it was motionless ploy, i wake with the notion to destroy
*sigh**snare*
next day, cold spirits spree thru my brain like a brain freeze
my body's been tinted, slain, siezed, haunted and deceased

Written in about 5-10 min, please feed

[James R.]

Much better. The multies were more complex, the flow was back to par. It wasn't really about anything, but you got into the visual aspect of your rhyming and I like that. Good work for 5-10mins.

[Tash8]

Much better. The multies were more complex, the flow was back to par. It wasn't really about anything, but you got into the visual aspect of your rhyming and I like that. Good work for 5-10mins.

yup not really about anything, i'm stuck at creativness lately havne't thought of anything creative.. thanks for feed.