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from the beginning to the end

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 17th, '07, 19:03

im a man who flew off the band wagon with no crew
and all i had in my hand was a pen that drew

my dad abandoned the family when i went to school
after it ended, back to my friends i'd tend my plans it's true

i entered the damned, condemned n doomed
yet i was sent here to stand, not sin so soon

my mission could land n lend me room
to lift up n plant a vision illumned

cuz i have just too little to let them resume
attemptin to effect my picture and out rule

my adventure i grew into, i can debut
don't forget this is an intro, my beginnin you view

im gonna rid you if you riducule
my origin :a legend due with the residue I've left to use

after my death comes thru, i've one step to do
which is Heaven, it happens to the best which choose to rep good news

ima catapult
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: from the beginning to the end

Postby James R. » Aug 19th, '07, 19:33

That was pretty decent. You stuck with a better rhyme throughout the piece than in previous stuff I've seen from you. It's not a long piece, but any longer and it would have started to get dry so kudos.
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