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Postby Enimee » Aug 27th, '07, 06:35

look kid i be rippin this shit flippin the script then limpin back to rip it again
im so sick with this shit like it i was ill wit colored skin from lickin a friend

but then again why would i try if im just typin a lie like i was hypin on fried
potatoes and dried tomatoes with eyes glued shut if i dont get this stipend ill die

its amazing how im still alive blazing the trees that be keepin me half buried in sty
but then again who'd carry this guy whos sticks with a scary pink tie if your wary of flies

cuz he stinks gotta mink but stole out a garbage can right next to a broken sink
im broke and weak with a flow thats less then meak that makes me look like a fedy wanna be

no explanation needed




it sucked lol exept the first bar or so i think
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Re: freekeystyle

Postby C-Game » Aug 28th, '07, 08:51

well enimee since its a somethin u summed up quick ill give u a feed accordingly

da first 2 bars and da 5'6th bars are good mate

good flow ( thanks to da multies .. it kept on flowin )

da flow went off after im broke and weak with a flow thats less then meak

anway decent drop..

had da multies, meanin and flow was there , ok structure,

didnt notice any wordplay / metas...
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