The Fight Within

[Emadyville]

I just wrote this, decided to kind of make like a short track with a fast tempo where the first 12 bars I sound like I'm quitting from the struggle, and then pause and pick up the tempo even faster to come back with 12 bars why I can't quit. Hopefully you like the idea, feedback please on the lyrics, content, flow, idea, etc. Thanks to all.

What happens when life becomes humdrum,
I feel dumb some of the time and numb from,
All the someone’s who decided to succumb,
And have dragged me down from number one,
To number none because I feel cumbersome,
What happened to my father’s youngest son,
He used to eat the game now his hunger’s none,
And he used to be the best under the sun,
No wonder he’s done after he blundered some,
Burned by others as his pen became a stun gun,
He couldn’t hold to write so now his run’s done,
He diminished, remains unfinished and undone…

But I can’t put it down so I just pick it up,
Take the page rip it up, just spit and stick it up,
Twist it up it in a ball of rage and lift it up,
Not be a bitch just spit and just switch it up,
I feel contagious as the range-just dangerous,
Flames have bust with such a game it’s us,
To just tame it’s tough with one just plain nuts,
When my brain just focus and rap the same stuff,
I will and cannot just ever give the game up,
From the beginning to now it’s just how I came up,
How I became me and how you became us,
Same man, same style, same skill, same guts…

[Emadyville]

Do I really have to bump my own shit to get some feed? Come on people I feed 90% of shit I read or hear on Tr.

[Emadyville]

Seriously? I'm going to bump this everyday til I get some solid feedback.

[JMG]

my bad, flow was a little of in the first verse got better in the 2nd, other then that some sick mulites and a good job keep it up

[Ka0t1c]

well i didnt wanna criticize it but you wanted feedback so... i dont like it when u constantly use the same words, and also your multies just werent fitting good for the verse, it didnt seem fresh either, i think it was done half ass'd or half fast

[JMG]

don't listen to him he said there was no metaphores in my '' keystyle files'' even tho it was filled with em.

yeah kaotic's gay logics dont make much sence
so dont take offence just look at his fake attempts

[Emadyville]

don't listen to him he said there was no metaphores in my '' keystyle files'' even tho it was filled with em.

yeah kaotic's gay logics dont make much sence
so dont take offence just look at his fake attempts

Well thanks. Yeah Kaotic there was a point to rhyming the same word a few times, cause the first rhyme of the multi was different. And the flow works for how I would do it, so it's cool you just read it differently. Idk why you meant half ass though when you know this shit rhymes better than all the stuff you put on here and yeah maybe half fast cause I wrote this in 15 minutes.