I Have a Plan (Bursting From My Head)

[Ka0t1c]

let me take you further into my journey where my world is now turning
cuz internally burning are these burdens, so surely staying sturdy aint occurring
i'm hurting, maybe i'm maturing as a person but my purpose has me worried
i work fast cuz i'm hurried and it gets worse, see, i panic, am i not worthy?
i can't stand it, no mercy's on this planet, i'm searching the land
but enduring demands reverse me into a berserk, deserted man, yet i'm thirsty
my journal's in my hand, i'm ready to insert these words, i have a plan i'll be birthing
to expand, i'm bursting from my head when shit hits the fan
it's during the second i'm emerging, i sit alert, i am inserting my brand...

[The Toy Soldier]

let me take you further into my journey where my world is now turning
cuz internally burning are these burdens, so surely staying sturdy aint occurring
i'm hurting, maybe i'm maturing as a person but my purpose has me worried
i work fast cuz i'm hurried and it gets worse, see, i panic, am i not worthy?
i can't stand it, no mercy's on this planet, i'm searching the land
but enduring demands reverse me into a berserk, deserted man, yet i'm thirsty
my journal's in my hand, i'm ready to insert these words, i have a plan i'll be birthing
to expand, i'm bursting from my head when shit hits the fan
it's during the second i'm emerging, i sit alert, i am inserting my brand...

I liek the rhymes and what the story tells but the lines seem a little too big the multies sace the structure from being too big but nice job keep it up

[mcZu]

Nice verse man, I like the ''long'' sentence rhymes
Nice multies, great story

Nice piece

[Ka0t1c]

thanx to both of u guys

[neversnooze]

this sounds really good, cant wait for a second verse

[Ka0t1c]

oh ok, i haven't thought of that

[Emadyville]

Yeah this verse is sick lyrically. Rhymes were nice, flowed well, make it into a song or something.

[Ka0t1c]

ok, i'll investigate further into my unexplored territory which lies inside my head and draw up a conclusion as to y i haven't begun to finish this outstanding piece that is so real to me n u

[Emadyville]

ok, i'll investigate further into my unexplored territory which lies inside my head and draw up a conclusion as to y i haven't begun to finish this outstanding piece that is so real to me n u

Idk if that was sarcasm but we all think you should finish it and record it, those were compliments. An amazing verse means nothing unless you spit it on a song with someone else or if it's in a full song, know what I mean?