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Postby Slim Zaddy » Oct 20th, '08, 19:11

I can write staff and spit things rough cuz life shows me more than enough
Everything I want, it just getting back on me with a bad results and insults
I feel like I need to move on and carry on but life keeps me mourn
I need a new born and be on thorn and think as if the game is just on
I can relate many staff to my tough ride , I need to slide beside a new life
Life with no strife , life with no people stabbing my back with a sharp knife
i can go through life complication what I need is just the information’s
i will let go of hesitation cuz it ruined me it screwed all of my destinations
i can say that I’m cool but inside me there’s a rage boost keeps me mused
I used to get things in opposite wings , life rings for me , but it stinks
Then I get sink in thoughts and imagination just to let my mind blinks

when i get pissed of life .. i wrote these lines .. hope u like it .. need ur opinions though :)
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Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 21st, '08, 01:49

ok, my opinion is this, stop it and start using something good and make sure it's true to your heart before you post or at least make it interesting cuz i didnt like it that much
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Postby neversnooze » Oct 21st, '08, 05:02

sorry man this sounded dull, i would recommend u redo this or scrap it
Sometimes I stay up so late that I have my morning coffee before I go to bed
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Postby Slim Zaddy » Oct 21st, '08, 14:40

ok guys ,, i really appriciate your opionions ... :y:
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