NEW Kaotic

[Ka0t1c]

i want you to know before i go
that i've got somethin to show:
no more am i low
i've come up from it so

i'm not just a Joe
there's a lot in my flow
my motto's to grow
as we walk down our roads

yeah, potholes do slow
me up til i'm towed
but i'm gonna erupt a valuable role
even although problems are prone

cuz still always a toll's
involved cuz my goal's
to solve what aint whole
that corrupts many souls

because love isn't full
we're outta control
we shove n we pull
don't doubt it, we owe

the fault is your own
sorry, can't close
me down by 4 walls
to surround me, i chose

my boundaries: exposed my alleys/my zones
but i'll proudly dispose all of my foes
who've found me at home
on my towering throne

challenge or don't
the cowards, they won't

[Emadyville]

Poetic, I liked it.

[Ka0t1c]

thanx, i guess it's poetic, lol

[neversnooze]

i will do my best to comment(trying to comment properly)

Flow: the flow seemed to simple
Structure: it was ok except for the 7th verse(second to last) it was longer compared to the others
Concept: i liked it, you had that journy type poetic concept

Conclusion: more word play would have made it better, if you need help with words go to http://www.dictionary.com, they also have a thesarous (words same meaning and sounding also opposite meanings)

5.5 out of 10

[Rain Matrix]

real good read, I expected nothing less

[Ka0t1c]

neversnooze, lol, i don't need help with any of those things you've mentioned so i'll just take it as a joke...

[neversnooze]

just throwing it into thin air