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Peep This

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 3rd, '08, 20:44

I don't have to Blame A Rivals Bars u couldn't slow me down with a Tranquilizer Dart
yur Man Is So Animal they wanna Ban Tha Flow my lyrical punches are Unblocked
cuz I had One Thought tha choice before a Gun Shot will u face death or Run Off
u don't know what this Playa's Bout I make it rain so much that Hate Tha Clouds
mention my family and I'll Waste Ya Now in battles I Lay Um Out
drink 40's and Hit That Kush I had a dream I Bitch Slapped Bush
known for revolution like tha Matrix they'll never say I Faithless
this is like Rewritten Depictions of my Keep Living Prescriptions
I'm a Free Christian watching others go after my Religion
there was Never Death if u Ressurect
I know tha story holy lies Test Yur Head
I'm good with that, there god is Measurements
hell is only a Lesser Threat
if u stop painting tha Deserts Red
snakes on a plane make tha Weather Spread
yur right evil will Burn Good
tha difference is I don't worship tha Worm Wood
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Re: Peep This

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 3rd, '08, 22:04

I liked it...
The flow was very hard to pick up, structure was lacking, rhymes were on point, vocab was nice.
7/10. Keep droppin bro!
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Peep This

Postby James R. » Dec 4th, '08, 04:05

MC Anonymous wrote:I liked it...
The flow was very hard to pick up, structure was lacking, rhymes were on point, vocab was nice.
7/10. Keep droppin bro!

Took the words write out of my mouth. Since it was so hard to keep up with your flow and structure it made it harder to enjoy your control of your words. Past that it was good though. I'll give it a 7 as well.
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