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Postby Solace » Dec 24th, '08, 17:53

Bleh.

I'm about to rock the beat harder than a crowd and solos,
Got you blinded by my rhymes like you was playing Marco and Polo,
Oh no...Unnatural disaster, this rhyme master,
Is kicking it faster than any other rapper,
Got you covered by plaster, so your unseen,
With rhymes like this I'm the perfect machine,
The super rhyme maker like Kid Rock, the career breaker,
Cause all of you bitches are faker than Pam's tit's jiggling when you shake her,
Woah...Major flashback, would you tap that?
You care about economy, naw not a rats ass,
So gimme the mic man, just pass that,
Give me the opportunity to kick some wackass,
Give them Epiphany's make their heart cold as ice,
No one can rhyme it with flows as tight...As me.
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Re: Random Shit

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 24th, '08, 18:00

Pretty decent, I seen much better from you though.
6/10
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Re: Random Shit

Postby Solace » Dec 24th, '08, 18:13

MC Anonymous wrote:Pretty decent, I seen much better from you though.
6/10

Thanks :y:
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Re: Random Shit

Postby Solace » Dec 24th, '08, 23:46

McMaybe wrote:Pretty good imo. I enjoyed it throughly, which is what matters. It was entertaining, not overly complex and overall a nice read.

8.5/10

Sweet :) Thanks man :y:
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Re: Random Shit

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 25th, '08, 00:00

it was pretty abstract but it didn't hurt the peice any... so good job
sometimes limiting your thoughts only limit's your creativity :y:
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Re: Random Shit

Postby mcZu » Dec 25th, '08, 01:44

Not bad, doesn't matter if it's not that complex
I enjoyed reading it :y:
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Re: Random Shit

Postby notoriouS-K-M » Dec 25th, '08, 18:23

It's pretty good. I didn't get bored reading it. Your flow is quite consistent throughout the verse. :y:
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Re: Random Shit

Postby Solace » Dec 25th, '08, 18:43

Thanks all, glad you liked it :)

@Notorious, how comes you havent been posting more pieces, i remember you used to
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Re: Random Shit

Postby notoriouS-K-M » Dec 26th, '08, 20:11

shadymademe wrote:Thanks all, glad you liked it :)

@Notorious, how comes you havent been posting more pieces, i remember you used to

dude I've been busy applying for medical colleges so I haven't had time to write anything.
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Re: Random Shit

Postby Solace » Dec 26th, '08, 23:56

notoriouS-K-M wrote:
shadymademe wrote:Thanks all, glad you liked it :)

@Notorious, how comes you havent been posting more pieces, i remember you used to

dude I've been busy applying for medical colleges so I haven't had time to write anything.

Oh okay, hopefully you get in one :y: Must be a lot of hard work.
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