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Re: Sinking Ships In Summer Season

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 25th, '08, 02:17

Chet Starr wrote:
McMaybe wrote:Pretty sick man. I enjoyed it.

9/10

Criticism: Improve your flow by adding inner-rhymes to your lines. :y:

thanks alot man :worship:

and I'm having a retard spell right now, so could you (or who ever see's this first) show a example of "inner-rhymes" :sweating:

Once I realize what they are, I'm defiantly start using them :smoking:

Internal rhymes,

like this;
Sit there quick get hit with a thick stick
rhyming slick with a bag full of tricks
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Sinking Ships In Summer Season

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 25th, '08, 02:23

Oh btw, this was pretty good.
Good job, 8/10.
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Sinking Ships In Summer Season

Postby Robbie G » Dec 25th, '08, 03:44

That was good man, you gonna record it?
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Re: Sinking Ships In Summer Season

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 25th, '08, 04:12

good rhymes, it was easy to follow and actually reminded me of summer
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Re: Sinking Ships In Summer Season

Postby Solace » Dec 25th, '08, 04:53

That was nice Chet, :y: 8.5/10

keep it up homie :happy:
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Re: Sinking Ships In Summer Season

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 25th, '08, 17:52

i really enjoyed reading it chet ,, nice job here bro .. keep droppin these shit ,. 9 /10 .. :y:
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Re: Sinking Ships In Summer Season

Postby James R. » Dec 26th, '08, 06:54

Rain Matrix wrote:good rhymes, it was easy to follow and actually reminded me of summer

Exactly what I was thinking

8.9/10 :shifty:
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