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Diamonds? Nah Platinum

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 31st, '08, 03:59

Credit to James R for helping me write the chorus (I suck at em')
Written to the beat of Diamonds from Sierra Leone. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LlUKeziqNiA
Should be recorded to tomorrow with said beat. :y:

lyrics in my mind will turn the paper to fire
and those dope artists are who I admire

Im potent, every time i write Im spittin dope shit
You wanna get fucked up, here I got the potion
Promotin violence when I'm silent or when I'm rhymin
Demotin your rank leave you fake bitches fryin

Call me the killa, punchlines smash my foes
clashing woes don't stop me from bashing hoes
stashing lyrical gold, replacing it with platinum
lyrics smash to paper when I begin to stamp em'
cramps come in my fingers, I can't write
My stand's right, as I run into the dark, damp night
damn right, I'll keep charging my energy tank
peek into the front lines to see my enemy's rank
your identity sank, mess with this... I'll squeeze and fire
the roast begins to ignite these trees with fire
freeze with wires before the suicide bomb explodes
drop your drones or I'll make my chest implode
stuck in a mode of a savage, angry mentality
and I can't determine what is the real actuality
sexuality stimulates, hammers eliminate
and I don't need my fists to really intimidate.

lyrics in my mind will turn the paper to fire
and those dope artists are who I admire

Im potent, every time i write Im spittin dope shit
You wanna get fucked up, here I got the potion
Promotin violence when I'm silent or when I'm rhymin
Demotin your rank leave you fake bitches fryin

Lyrics blend cryptic messages with letters
getting severed is not only honorable but better
I'm clever, the wicked wordsmith forging lines
turning them to the sickest bars dead or alive
sleep deprived, 24 hour work days to my art
if you take my mic away, suddenly my eyes spark
and I attack whether it's dark or light, with all my might
I begin to fight until you can't see your sight
I free your fright, as your soul flies to the heavens
as God takes a stamp and gives your forehead 3 sevens
no weapons to save you from the wrath of studs
smacking your back until you take a bath with blood

lyrics in my mind will turn the paper to fire
and those dope artists are who I admire

Im potent, every time i write Im spittin dope shit
You wanna get fucked up, here I got the potion
Promotin violence when I'm silent or when I'm rhymin
Demotin your rank leave you fake bitches fryin

Demolish any wack MC's who wanna tempt me
I'll expose you like a kick boxers bent knee
flesh indents bleed, attacks from me brings death
I'm so dope that when I begin rap I sing meth
like sonic I will die when there's no rings left
get up close and personal with my bling cleft
a diamond jaw spittin' multi platinum bars
chewed on the bones of wack rappers and spat them far
just cause' your shit is hard doesn't mean you drop heat
cause I spit to my heartbeat, and that stops beats
like cops feet, I stay with a gat on each side
and my hands are giants so that makes my reach wide
teach vibes so you can really feel my flow
and when I get on the mic I'll really steal the show.
Last edited by MC Anonymous on Dec 31st, '08, 05:53, edited 1 time in total.
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Diamonds? Nah Platinum

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 31st, '08, 04:34

pretty insane, i enjoyed it :y: :y:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Diamonds? Nah Platinum

Postby James R. » Dec 31st, '08, 04:38

I fed throughout the process and it's sick man. One of my favorites from you. Flow is on fucking POINT
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Re: Diamonds? Nah Platinum

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 31st, '08, 04:40

Kaotic wrote:pretty insane, i enjoyed it :y: :y:

Thanks bro! :y:
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Re: Diamonds? Nah Platinum

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 31st, '08, 04:42

James R. wrote:I fed throughout the process and it's sick man. One of my favorites from you. Flow is on fucking POINT

Thanks bro :y: :y:
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Re: Diamonds? Nah Platinum

Postby Solace » Dec 31st, '08, 05:08

Wow man that was fucking dope, sorry i didnt feed earlier when you asked i completely forgot. But seriously man that was crazyyy! I will def. feed the audio :worship:
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Re: Diamonds? Nah Platinum

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 31st, '08, 05:09

shadymademe wrote:Wow man that was fucking dope, sorry i didnt feed earlier when you asked i completely forgot. But seriously man that was crazyyy! I will def. feed the audio :worship:

thanks bro! :y:
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Re: Diamonds? Nah Platinum

Postby Boston » Dec 31st, '08, 05:57

i love the first verse, has strong imagery and its like when i read i can go along with whats happening
its not the need a dictionary verses you usually do which i like, multies there and the flow seems to be on point.

your second verse is just meh to me, i think its the weakest verse of the song (not saying its wack or anything) but i dont think its up to your usual standards.

the third verse i really enjoy, its good to see you can make punchlines and still make sense of what your saying and stay on flow, rhyme scheme etc

that might be my favorite verse

the chorus is just a chorus to me so im really not going to comment that
i will most definitely download it when you record it

remember just take your time and all that!

good shit man keep it up
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Re: Diamonds? Nah Platinum

Postby Dark Blue » Dec 31st, '08, 19:35

verry nice i liked this alot :y: good job
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Re: Diamonds? Nah Platinum

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 31st, '08, 20:14

shadybaby101 wrote:verry nice i liked this alot :y: good job

thanks :y:
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Re: Diamonds? Nah Platinum

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 31st, '08, 22:34

Chet Starr wrote:finally remembered to feed this lol

really fucking crazy shit man, flow was good, rhymes were great as always, I can't wait to hear this :y:

Thanks dude :y:
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