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Realize The Reality

Postby Solace » Jan 18th, '09, 03:19

Meh...

Truth will incarcerate you in a rough raw reality,
Piss you off intentionally, want you to get mad at me,
It's saddenning, like a small mouse in a maze,
Spouses are dazed, human mouth is decayed,
Friend is betrayed, teen boy just got played,
Girl just got interested in the prostitution trade,
Little boy is afraid, where is my mom and mydad,
It's so sad, they didn't even go to his grad,
All of these emotions are floating in a near reality,
See, the truth hurts, it ruins our morality.
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Re: Realize The Reality

Postby James R. » Jan 18th, '09, 03:47

Short, sweet, and pretty sick if I say so myself. I like the rhyming and the rhyme scheme you had going on in there man. Good shit. Flow was on point. Vocab fit well too. Very good job.
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Re: Realize The Reality

Postby Solace » Jan 18th, '09, 03:57

James R. wrote:Short, sweet, and pretty sick if I say so myself. I like the rhyming and the rhyme scheme you had going on in there man. Good shit. Flow was on point. Vocab fit well too. Very good job.

Thanks man, glad you liked it! :happy:
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Re: Realize The Reality

Postby gutawafang » Jan 23rd, '09, 02:45

That is so great Epiphany. :flower:
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Re: Realize The Reality

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 23rd, '09, 12:09

it's pretty good i liked it :y:
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Re: Realize The Reality

Postby mcZu » Jan 23rd, '09, 18:44

Love this one, great way of putting together words. Flow was onpoint, maybe jus once off but that may be ´cause I dunno how you flow. Rhyming was above average and I love the message. :y:
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Re: Realize The Reality

Postby Solace » Jan 24th, '09, 03:00

Thanks all of you, im glad it was a good piece and that you guys enjoyed it! :)
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Re: Realize The Reality

Postby Robbie G » Jan 24th, '09, 03:24

It was pretty good but it didn't flow for me at all.
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Re: Realize The Reality

Postby Solace » Jan 24th, '09, 03:54

Shady Babie wrote:It was pretty good but it didn't flow for me at all.

Thanks bro :happy:
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Re: Realize The Reality

Postby Solace » Jan 25th, '09, 15:21

SLMacDougall wrote:sick sick sick sick shit.

i hate it wen ppl say it didnt flow. u obvs ent gna write summin tht doesnt flow smh

haha thanks man, i appreciate it!
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