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Hot Lighter to My Neck

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Hot Lighter to My Neck

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 20th, '09, 09:01

why should i just let it slide cuz i can't get this out my mind, how could i
it's about right now the time, i'm no longer the good guy
so tonight someone is gonna die because in the eyes of a soldier
there's not an alibi, your life would be over if i wasn't sober
cuz you've crossed a fine line, you blind sided by my shoulder
your sign's to go hide before you i find in the corner
and it's more than a warnin, my crime is much colder
cuz i won't rewind but move forward, are you tongue tied
the story's recordin, keep on your front light and the back door well boarded
cuz a war has been ordered, hope you're ready for torture
cuz it's better you're fried, rather me the court's joker...
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Hot Lighter to My Neck

Postby spitz2 » Jan 20th, '09, 09:09

i was a lil skeptical at first cuz it was kinda simple....but i started really likin it when you kept switch between the "i" and the "ordin" rhymes. shit was tight son :y:
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Re: Hot Lighter to My Neck

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 20th, '09, 09:11

thanx man, just wrote it while sittin on the john, lol
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Hot Lighter to My Neck

Postby spitz2 » Jan 20th, '09, 09:13

we call that the thinkin machine
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Re: Hot Lighter to My Neck

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 20th, '09, 09:19

man ,, i hve seen you writing much these days but keep it going cuz you're writing some dope shit . well i think this one is great , i can feel what you are trying to say .. it's good ..gd shit .. keep it up bro .. :y:
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Re: Hot Lighter to My Neck

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 20th, '09, 09:22

thanx :D
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Hot Lighter to My Neck

Postby James R. » Jan 20th, '09, 21:42

LOVE the rhyme scheme man. Made this very sick bro. Flow was spot on as well. Tight drop man.
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Re: Hot Lighter to My Neck

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 21st, '09, 00:06

thanx! :D
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Hot Lighter to My Neck

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 21st, '09, 00:11

prolly one day, u have no idea how much material i have to record right now... i will record stuff when i get out the Army
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Hot Lighter to My Neck

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 26th, '09, 21:16

hell yeah! :D
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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