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Don't Bail (Soft & Poetic)

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Don't Bail (Soft & Poetic)

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 20th, '09, 16:54

i've awakened my instincts and strengthened my senses
so i aint taking the main stream, i'm making an entrance
created by big dreams to escape out the trenches
or one day i'd be extinct, no way, i'll contend it
always i must finish, not fail my mission
i bring a new vision to our trail cuz missing's
details, now listen, prevail with ambitions
not derail from collision, don't bail cuz the tensions
Last edited by Ka0t1c on Jan 21st, '09, 00:09, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Don't Bail (Soft & Poetic)

Postby James R. » Jan 20th, '09, 21:58

Short, sweet, and sick man. I liked the flow. Read it straight through without an issue. Nice job.
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Re: Don't Bail (Soft & Poetic)

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 21st, '09, 00:03

thanx for feedin
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Re: Don't Bail (Soft & Poetic)

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 21st, '09, 00:10

thanx a lot Scott, lol
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Re: Don't Bail (Soft & Poetic)

Postby mcZu » Jan 21st, '09, 22:47

Loved the poetic vibe, like James said it's short and sweet. It flowed great, loved the main stream/entrance line :y:
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Re: Don't Bail (Soft & Poetic)

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 22nd, '09, 04:23

thanx for checking it out, i'm glad u like it :D
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