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Releasing My Pain

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Releasing My Pain

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 21st, '09, 19:32

I'm a whiteboy trying to blow up like an atomic Explosion
there's a recession right now so I guess I better Get Going

full speed ahead I'm charging into the future like a Stampede
I could write up enough lyrics to rain down on any Damn Beat

my foes are left cold and my friends are like my Body's Blood
when you hear my raw music you know it was Not Retouched

mixing is nice but you need cash for that Kind of Service
hidden from sight this badass raps as he rhymes them Verses

I'm like most people in this world meaning I've Been Hurt
my first play was an earthquake and you've found the Center

if I can't live in peace I'm gonna take the game By Storm
your either down with me or your one of the mc's I Warned
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Re: Releasing My Pain

Postby mcZu » Jan 21st, '09, 22:41

Loved the flow man, rhymes were great, loved how you rhymed Hurt with Centre. :y:
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Re: Releasing My Pain

Postby James R. » Jan 22nd, '09, 03:07

This is wayy different for you. I don't wanna say dumbed down, but not quite as complex. I like it though. Flow was nice on this and I like the rhyming a lot. Good job man.
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Re: Releasing My Pain

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 22nd, '09, 03:28

good job man, don't stop writing, i missed u, lol...but seriously
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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